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The line chart represents how the number of domestics in a US town use four common technologies for watching TV changed over a period of 10 years. Generally, there was an upward trend in the use of internet and satellite while the other two types of technology showed a sharp decrease in the same time. It can be seen from the graph that the number of households used internet was the lowest in the beginning of the period. However, this figure rose dramatically by nearly 20, 000 in two years later, before continue having a rapid increase to reach a peak and become the most popular technology in 2014 almost 200, 000 households. Another upward trend – satellite experienced a stable growth from 70, 000 to approximately 120, 000 households over the 10 years period. On the contrary, broadcast started at the highest in 2004 with 100, 000 households, then this data dropped considerably and come to be the least favourite at the end of the period. Simillary, cable commenced at over 80, 000. Although the figure saw a slight increase by around 20, 000 households, this number dipped moderately, becoming the second lowest in 2014.
The line chart represents how the number of domestics in a US town
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four common technologies for watching TV
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over a period of 10 years.

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of internet and satellite while the other two types of technology
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a sharp decrease in the same time.

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from the graph that the number of
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households
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internet was the lowest in the beginning of the period.
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continue having a rapid increase to reach a peak and become the most popular technology in 2014 almost 200, 000
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satellite experienced a stable growth from 70, 000 to approximately 120, 000
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over the 10 years period.

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at the highest in 2004 with 100, 000
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households
, then this data dropped
considerably
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to be the least
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, cable commenced at over 80, 000. Although the figure
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a slight increase by around 20, 000
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, this number dipped
moderately
, becoming the second lowest in 2014.
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