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imprisonment in five Countries between 1930 to 1980.

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The number of imprisonment in five Countries such as Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United State and Canada depicted by the rendered by the graph from 1930 to 1980. To begin with, in 1930, Great Britain has lowest number of imprisonment, it accounted for around 30 thousands it remain steadily till 1940 and after that it increased step by step and picked to around 90 thousands in the year of 1980. In the same way, the imprisonment of Australia was almost 70 % in the year of 1930. it was fall down during the next two decade, it accounted for almost 50 thousands then next 20 years, it was dramatical increased and reached on 80 thousands in 1970 and next decade it was decreased by 20 thousands. New Zealand and United State has Same number of imprisonment ( 100 thousands) in the year of 1030. after that former has decreased to around 50 thousands and latter was rose to approximately 130 thousands. Then the number of imprisonment fluctuated and get top among the five countries. on the other hand, United State steadily increased and picked to 90 thousands in the year of 1980. In initial stage Canada was a top in the number of imprisonment in 1930. after that it was almost steadily for next three decade then slidely decreased for next two decade and reached on around 90% in the year of 1980. overall, United State was highest number of imprisonment over the period of 50 years.
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in five Countries such as Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand,
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and Canada depicted by the rendered by the graph from 1930 to 1980.

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90 thousands in the
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New Zealand and
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fluctuated and
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top among the five countries.
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