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The three pie charts show the proportion of yearly expenditures of a specific UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001

The three pie charts show the proportion of yearly expenditures of a specific UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001 L3rKR
The three pie charts show the proportion of yearly expenditures of a specific UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. It is easy to see that the majority of expenditures among the three years belonged to teachers’ salaries and the least spending was recorded by insurance. In 1981, the spending on teachers’ wages was 40 percent then growth to 50% in 1991, after that decreased to 45% in 2001. It was just 2% of expenditure on insurance in 1981, in 1991 slightly increased to 3%, and surprisingly the consumption skyrocketed to four times, 8% in comparison with 1981 in 2001. However, the proportion of money spent on other workers’ salaries had been falling during the periods, starting at 28% in 1981 and decreased to 22% in 1991, eventually becoming so low about 15% in 2001. The spending on resources and furniture and equipment showed the opposite, which were the same at 15% each in 1981. The first one gained by 5% to 20% in the 10 year period and almost halved (9%) in 2001, while the latter one first fell to one-third of that of 1981 in 1991 and surged to a high of 23% finally.
The three pie charts
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the proportion of yearly expenditures of a specific UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. It is easy to
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see
that the majority of expenditures among the three years belonged to teachers’ salaries and the least spending
was recorded
by insurance.

In 1981, the spending on teachers’ wages was 40 percent then growth to 50% in 1991, after that decreased to 45% in 2001.

It was
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2% of expenditure on insurance in 1981, in 1991
slightly
increased to 3%, and
surprisingly
the consumption skyrocketed to four times, 8%
in comparison
with 1981 in 2001.
However
, the proportion of money spent on other workers’ salaries had been falling during the periods, starting at 28% in 1981 and decreased to 22% in 1991,
eventually
becoming
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low about 15% in 2001.

The spending on resources and furniture and equipment
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showed
the opposite, which were the same at 15% each in 1981. The
first
one gained by 5% to 20% in the
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10 year
period and almost halved (9%) in 2001, while the latter one
first
fell to one-third of that of 1981 in 1991 and surged to a high of 23%
finally
.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts show the proportion of yearly expenditures of a specific UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001

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