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he difficulties that people moving to other countries have and how the problems vary according to their age.

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The chart shows the difficulties that people moving to other countries have and how the problems vary according to their age. The biggest problem from 35 to 54 year olds face with is sorting out the healthcare. More than 37 percent of them encountered it, higher than the group of 18-34 and over 55 years old. Ranked second is the group of people over 55 years old, accounting for about 36 percent. The 18-34 age group made up nearly 34 percent, the least number of people with health problems. The age group with the most money-related problems is the middle age group, which makes up 35 percent. Besides, the 18-34 age group is equally high (34 percent). There are a few people with less money problems in the age group over 55. 19 percent of the middle-aged group had difficulty finding a school for their children- the highest of the three groups. The age group 18-34 accounted for the lower (6 percent) and the lowest age group was over 55. in summary, all three have many difficulties but the middle-aged group will have more problems than the other two groups.
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vary according to their age.

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from 35 to
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54 year olds
face with is sorting out the healthcare. More than 37
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of them encountered it, higher than the
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of 18-34 and
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55 years
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. Ranked second is the
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55 years
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, accounting for about 36
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. The 18-34
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made up
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34
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, the least number of
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with health problems.

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with the most money-related
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is the middle
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, which
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. There are a few
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had difficulty finding a school for their children- the highest of the three
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. The
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18-34 accounted for the lower (6
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was
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summary, all three have
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difficulties
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the middle-aged
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will have more
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IELTS academic he difficulties that people moving to other countries have and how the problems vary according to their age.

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5 paragraphs
190 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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