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how middle-income families allocate their household budget in two different years

The chart shows the sales of a small restaurant in downtown business district during the week of October 7-13. Both lunch and dinner sales followed a general pattern that the sales rose significant during weekdays and there was a notable shift on the weekends. Weekday lunch and dinner sales peaked on Friday, then dropped down on the weekend. For lunch sales, the sales were approximately $2, 400 during the week of October 7-13. The highest sale was on Wednesday at the amount of $2, 595, while the lowest sale was on Sunday at the amount of $1, 550. Accordingly, dinner sales remained high during the weekdays and went down significantly on weekends. The highest dinner sale was on Friday for $4, 350. The lower sale was on Sunday at the amount of $2, 450 which was lower than Friday’s sale a lot. Overall, it is shown that both lunch and dinner sales increased during weekdays and decreased during weekends.
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restaurant in downtown business district during the week of October 7-13. Both lunch and
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followed a general pattern that the
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rose significant during weekdays and there was a notable shift on the weekends. Weekday lunch and
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peaked on Friday, then
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For lunch
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, the
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were approximately $2, 400 during the week of October 7-13. The highest
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was on Wednesday at the amount of $2, 595, while the lowest
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was on Sunday at the amount of $1, 550.

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dinner
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remained high during the weekdays and went down
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on weekends. The highest
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dinner
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was on Friday for $4, 350. The lower
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was on Sunday at the amount of $2, 450 which was lower than Friday’s
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a lot.

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increased during weekdays and decreased during weekends.
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IELTS academic how middle-income families allocate their household budget in two different years

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159 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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