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how district park was looked in 2009 and how to looks in present.

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The maps compare the information about how district park was looked in 2009 and how to looks in present. overall, several changes can be witnessed throughout thr given period, however, the most noticeable is cycling path and picnic area. One change that stands out is that there has been significant redevelopment over the whole period. Picnic area have constructed in the south west. pound is situated in south although, just for the fun they have added boating area. Green area have manged to construct to café in south east. Moreover, between green area and children's play toilets' have built. Another striking change is that previously there was only children's play area but now for more facilities it has added the children's soft play area. car parking capacity have extended to 20 cars to 50 cars over 12 years. Cycling path is newly introduce for children's to learn how to cycling. Nevertheless, Football ground and tennis courts still stand.
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was looked
in 2009 and how to looks in present.
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that stands out is that there has been significant redevelopment over the whole period. Picnic
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have constructed in the
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south west
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pound
is situated
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for the fun they have
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boating
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. Green
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have manged to construct to café in
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south east
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play toilets' have built.

Another striking
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is that previously there was
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children's
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for more facilities it has
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soft play
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car
parking capacity have extended to 20 cars to 50 cars over 12 years. Cycling path is
newly
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to learn how to cycling.
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IELTS academic how district park was looked in 2009 and how to looks in present.

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158 words
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