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Mixed line graph and bar chart

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The provided line graph highlights the number of visits by United Kingdom citizens and people coming from abroad over the 20 years. The bar chart illustrates how many tourists visited by the most outstanding countries in the given year. Units are measured in millions. Overall, the number of UK citizens had a larger proportion compared with the residents of abroad significantly. While the people of France experienced the highest amount of visits Turkey showed the least account in the given year. In terms of UK visitors, it stood at just above the 10 million in 1979 before surging enormously reaching to around 50 million. The amount of tourists coming abroad accounted 10 million at first, and then increased gradually until the end of period showing the index of just below 30 million. Considering about visitors of various countries, both Spain and France witnessed a larger proportion of nearly 12 and around 8 million respectively comparing than others. In contrast, Turkey and Greece people weren’t interested traveling much as others in 1999 while the residents of USA travelled approximately 3 million which was higher than Turkey and Greece.

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people
 coming from abroad over the 20 years. The bar chart illustrates how This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 tourists visited by the most outstanding countries in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 year. Units are measured
 in millions.

Overall
, the number of UK citizens had a larger proportion compared with the residents of abroad significantly
. “While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 of France experienced the highest amount of visits Turkey This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 the least account in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 year.

In terms of UK visitors, it stood at This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 above the 10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in 1979 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 surging enormously
 reaching to around 50 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
. The amount of tourists coming abroad accounted 10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 at first
, and then increased gradually
 until the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of period showing the index of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 below 30 million.

Did you mean simply "Considering visitors"? You do not need the word "about" here.Considering visitors
Considering about visitors
 of various countries, both Spain and France witnessed a larger proportion of nearly
 12 and around 8 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
respectively
Possible agreement error. The noun 'comparing' seems to be countable, so consider using: "compares".compares
comparing
 than others. In contrast
, Turkey and Greece This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 weren’t interested traveling much as others in 1999 while the residents A determiner is probably missing here: "of the USA".of the USA
of USA
 travelled approximately 3 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 which was higher than Turkey and Greece. 