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The diagram represents changes that have happened at West Park Secondary school from 1950 to 2010.

The diagram represents changes that have happened at West Park Secondary school from 1950 to 2010. 26QAj
The diagram represents changes that have happened at West Park Secondary school from 1950 to 2010. Overall, it is clear how the farmland has experienced more changes than other parts. Unlike School, which remained the same during the whole period. From 1950 to 1980, the main changes were in replacing the Houses territory with two new buildings: Car Park and Science block. As well as the Farmland was replaced by Sports field. The School building along with the Playground area did not change at all. From 1980 to 2010, the Sports field was redistributed. One was part was reduced and another part was adjusted to the Car park’s zone to increase the area of it. The playground was modified a little. It was mainly diminished. On the contrary, the School block was not distributed at all. To sum it up, it is visible how Car park became the largest part of the territory, thereafter, the Playground with School block did not experience the same changes.
The diagram represents
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changes
that have happened at West
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Park
Secondary
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school
from 1950 to 2010.

Overall
, it is
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clear
how the farmland has experienced more
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changes
than other
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parts
. Unlike
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School
, which remained the same during the whole period.

From 1950 to 1980, the main
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changes
were in replacing the
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Houses
territory with two new buildings: Car
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Park
and Science block.
As well
as the Farmland
was replaced
by Sports field. The
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School
building along with the Playground area did not
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change
at all.

From 1980 to 2010, the Sports field
was redistributed
. One was
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part
was
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reduced
and another
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part
was adjusted
to the Car
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park’s
zone to increase the area of it. The playground
was modified
a
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little
. It was
mainly
diminished.
On the contrary
, the
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School
block was not distributed at all.

To sum it up, it is visible how Car
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park
became the largest
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part
of the territory, thereafter, the Playground with
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School
block did not experience the same
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changes
.
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IELTS academic The diagram represents changes that have happened at West Park Secondary school from 1950 to 2010.

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165 words
6.0
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