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how children travelled to and from school

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The chart gives you information on how children travelled to and from school in the years 1990 and 2010. The modes of transport were by car, walking, cycling, walking and by bus and by bus only. A striking feature in this chart is that the number of children who travelled by car has increased from 1990 to 2010. In 1990 the most number of trips per year by children were by walking. However in 2010 it reduced to up to 6 million trips per year. The total number of trips to school by cycling and walking and bus were approximately 6 million in 1990. However the number of trips to school by cycling reduced to 2 million and the number of trips to school by walking and bus reduced to about 3 million in 2010. There isn’t a significant change to the number of trips to school by bus. In 1990 it was about 7 million and in 2010 it came down to approximately 5 million. In 1990 the amount of children who travelled to and from school by car was significantly lower than the children who travelled by walking. In contrast in 2010 the number of children who travelled to school by car increased and the number of children walking to school has decreased. In 2010 children travelled to school by bus more than they cycled to school.
The chart gives you information on how
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children
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travelled
to and from
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school
in the years

1990 and 2010. The modes of transport were by
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car
, walking, cycling, walking and by
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bus


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and
by bus
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only
.

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number
of
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children
who
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travelled
by
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car
has

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increased
from 1990 to 2010. In 1990 the most
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number
of
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trips
per year by
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children
were
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by


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walking
.
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However
in 2010 it
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reduced
to up to 6
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million
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trips
per year. The total
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number
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of


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trips
to
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school
by cycling and walking and bus were approximately 6
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million
in 1990.

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the
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by cycling
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reduced
to 2
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million
and the
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number
of trips

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to
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by walking and bus
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reduced
to about 3
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in 2010. There isn’t a
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significant


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change
to the
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by bus. In
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and in 2010
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it


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came
down to approximately 5 million.

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to and from
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was
significantly


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lower
than the
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who
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travelled
by walking. In
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contrast
in 2010 the
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children


who
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walking to
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decreased
. In 2010
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by bus more than they cycled to
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IELTS academic how children travelled to and from school

Academic
  American English
15 paragraphs
229 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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