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Happy Valley Shopping Centre

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The given map charts demonstrate information about the infrastructure of happy Valley Shopping Center in the selected two years 1982 and 2012. Having a glass, a plethora of improvement were there in a shopping centre by planners, only entertainment area and toilet room were not removed in the two different years. Turning to detail, there was a lake in 1983 which was demolished and moved into furniture retail in the year of 2012, although a parking lot was opened for a public in the Southwest -side in 2012. since 1982, there was a lobby near the entrance gate and it was knocked down by the head of shopping centre in 2012. The entertainment area and toilet place were remained in the given period. Moving towards the rest of description, in 1982 a coffee shop and food store was replaced into Sports store and electronic store in the north-direction, as a sport Store, Electronic store and furniture area which was converted in the themend restaurants in the right- hand side and a food store was the built in 2012 at the same side.
The
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given
map charts demonstrate information about the infrastructure of happy Valley Shopping Center in the selected two years 1982 and 2012. Having a glass, a plethora of improvement were there in a shopping
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centre
by planners,
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only
entertainment area and
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toilet room
were not removed in the two
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different
years. Turning to detail, there was a lake in 1983 which
was demolished
and
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moved
into furniture retail in the year of 2012, although a parking lot
was opened
for a public in the Southwest -side in 2012.
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since
1982, there was a lobby near the entrance gate and it
was knocked
down by the head of shopping
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centre
in 2012. The entertainment area and toilet place
were remained
in the
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given
period. Moving towards the rest of description, in 1982 a coffee shop and food
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store
was replaced
into Sports
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store
and electronic
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store
in the north-direction, as a sport
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Store
, Electronic
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store
and furniture area which
was converted
in the
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themend
restaurants in the right- hand side and a food
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store
was the
A hyphen is missing in the adjective "built-in".
built in
2012 at the same side.

IELTS academic Happy Valley Shopping Centre

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
182 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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