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Here you find a line graph about the amount of disposable income available to both young people and seniors in Canada between 2000 and 2010 in combination with a table showing data about the sales of products in four different years within the same period.

Here you find a line graph about the amount of disposable income available to both young people and seniors in Canada between 2000 and 2010 in combination with a table showing data about the sales of products in four different years within the same period. BgEA6
Line graph compares amount of disposable wage per week for young people and senior people in Canada country over the period of 10years from 2000 to 2010. And tabular chart indicates sales data of four products for the years 2001, 2004, 2007, and 2010. Disposable income from both group shows some fluctuations. Young group's wage was at lowest at starting of decade and was highest at fourth year. Wage of seniors hit maximum and minimum twice during time span of decade. Firstly, amount of income from people of age between 15-24 get instant growth in 2001. After then it takes slight increase and keep growing to the 110$/week. Then it fell off drastically during year 2005. And some flucation shown during 2005- 2010 and hitted 50$/week at the end. Same way senior people wages git lower at 160$/week during 2003 and 2004. After it took dramatic upwards to maximum point of 200$/week twice at 2004 and 2009. Ans at the end of the decade it touches 190$/week. While in sales of video games and running shoes there were fluctuations. Videogame sales increased over the decades. Running shoes sell was also increased till 2017 but it fell of by 1% by 2010. Then in glass and aids there were no big changes. Fluctuations were in range of 1% plus or minus.
Line graph compares amount of disposable wage per week for young
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people
and senior
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people
in Canada country over the period of 10years from 2000 to 2010. And tabular chart indicates sales data of four products for the years 2001, 2004, 2007, and 2010.

Disposable income from both group
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shows
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some
fluctuations. Young group's wage was at lowest at starting of decade and was highest at fourth
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year
. Wage of seniors hit maximum and minimum twice during time span of decade.

Firstly
, amount of income from
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people
of age between 15-24
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get
instant growth in 2001. After
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then it
takes slight increase and
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keep
growing to the
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110$
/week. Then it fell off
drastically
during
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year
2005. And
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some
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flucation
shown during
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2005- 2010
and
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hitted
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50$
/week at the
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end
. Same way senior
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people
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wages
git lower at
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$160".
160$
/week during 2003 and 2004. After it took dramatic upwards to maximum point of
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200$
/week twice at 2004 and 2009. Ans at the
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end
of the decade it touches
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190$
/week.

While in sales of video games and running shoes there were fluctuations.
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Videogame
sales increased over the decades. Running shoes sell was
also
increased till 2017
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it fell of by 1% by 2010. Then in glass and aids there were no
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big
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. Fluctuations were in range of 1% plus or minus.
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IELTS academic Here you find a line graph about the amount of disposable income available to both young people and seniors in Canada between 2000 and 2010 in combination with a table showing data about the sales of products in four different years within the same period.

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