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The supplied charts represent the education levels by different age groups and gender in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in the year 2010. Overall, in 2020 youth of Glasgow is highly educated with more than 70 percent share of degree holders. However, the women stand above men when it comes to no qualification and both gender tie at having school certificates. Firstly, the university degree is completed by the age bracket of 24 to 35 with striking number of 76 percent proving the youth is largely involved in higher studies in 2010. With percentage share of 71, both 16 to 24 and 25 to 50 age groups are tying. Although, as the age increases above 50, this number declines by 25 percent and comes at 50 percent and further shrinks to 25 percent at 75 and more old age people. On the other hand, the Glasgow women are less in number when it comes to university degrees as compared to men with 29 percent share. But, with 33 percent of school certificate holder, Glasgow proves there is no difference in gender at school level education.
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groups and gender in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in the year 2010.

Overall
, in 2020 youth of Glasgow is
highly
educated with more than 70
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share of degree holders.
However
, the women stand above
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men
when it
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comes
to no qualification and both gender tie at having school certificates.

Firstly
, the university degree
is completed
by the
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bracket of 24 to 35 with striking number of 76
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percent
proving the youth is
largely
involved in higher studies in 2010. With percentage share of 71, both 16 to 24 and 25 to 50
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age
groups are tying. Although, as the
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increases above 50, this number declines by 25
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percent
and
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at 50
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and
further
shrinks to 25
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at 75 and more
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On the other hand
, the Glasgow women are
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less in number
when it
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comes
to university degrees as compared to
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men
with 29
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, with 33
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of school certificate holder, Glasgow proves there is no difference in gender at school level education.
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4 paragraphs
185 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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