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The charts compare medical resources and how long the citizens are expected to live in various countries around the world. It can be clearly seen that the hospital in Japan provides the highest number of beds while its citizens spend the least on treating their health. Conversely, those in the US have a different pattern from Japan’s According to the bar chart, the figure for hospital beds in Japan is considerably higher than other seven countries, registered for 14 beds per thousand of the population. In Germany, it is supplied at the second rank, 8 beds per thousand of its citizens, followed by the Netherlands where this resource is occupied for just over 4 units. However, the rest of the countries have fewer resources to serve their population at lower than 4 beds per thousand of the population. Based on the table, individuals in the US spend much more money on their health that are threefold from the lowest amount of the money spent in Japan. In contrast, the average life expectancy of Japanese people is longer than the US’s by 5 years from age at 83.
The charts compare medical resources and how long the citizens are
expected
to
live
in various countries around the world.

It can be
clearly
seen
that the hospital in Japan provides the highest number of
beds
while its citizens spend the least on treating their health.
Conversely
, those in the US have a
different
pattern from Japan’s

According to the bar chart, the figure for hospital
beds
in Japan is
considerably
higher than other seven countries, registered for 14
beds
per thousand of the population. In Germany, it
is supplied
at the second rank, 8
beds
per thousand of its citizens, followed by the Netherlands where this resource
is occupied
for
just
over 4 units.
However
, the rest of the countries have fewer resources to serve their population at lower than 4
beds
per thousand of the population.

Based on the table, individuals in the US spend much more money on their health that are threefold from the lowest amount of the money spent in Japan.
In contrast
, the average life expectancy of Japanese
people
is longer than the US’s by 5 years from age at 83.
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IELTS academic healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries

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  American English
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187 words
6.5
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