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he given bar chart demonstrates the constituents of GDP in the UK for 5 years:1992,1994,1996,1998,2000.

he given bar chart demonstrates the constituents of GDP in the UK for 5 years: 1992, 1994, 1996, 1998, 2000. Nmy6q
The given bar chart demonstrates the constituents of GDP in the UK for 5 years: 1992, 1994, 1996, 1998, 2000. At first glance, the proportion of IT industry has substantially rose while the percentage of service industry witnessed a slighter increased. In 2000, the percentage of service industry accounted for over 8% of the UK’s GDP, which is doubled the proportion of its in 1992. Similarly, the IT industry contributed around 6% in 1992; however, it peaked at approximately 15 % in the subsequent 8 years. In addition, the highest difference of proportion between two industries was in 1998, with IT industry held more than 4% of the service industry. The IT industry was accumulated less than 2% of GDP in the first 3 years, whereas the percentage of the service industry rose by 2. 5% of the UK ‘s GDP. On one hand, the percentage of the IT industry in UK has rockected in the 1998 with12% and reached the highest point of 15%. On the other hand, service industry has a consistently growth in GDP in 1998 and 2000 with around 7. 7 and 8. 2 respectively.
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bar chart demonstrates the constituents of GDP in the UK for 5 years: 1992, 1994, 1996, 1998, 2000.

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first
glance, the proportion of IT
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industry
has
substantially
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rose
while the
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percentage
of
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service
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industry
witnessed a slighter increased.

In 2000, the
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percentage
of
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service
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industry
accounted for over 8% of the UK’s GDP, which
is doubled
the proportion of its in 1992.
Similarly
, the IT
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industry
contributed around 6% in 1992;
however
, it peaked at approximately 15 % in the subsequent 8 years.
In addition
, the highest difference of proportion between two
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industries
was in 1998, with IT
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industry
held more than 4% of the
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service
industry.

The IT
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industry
was accumulated
less than 2% of GDP in the
first
3 years, whereas the
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percentage
of the
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service
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industry
rose by 2. 5% of the UK ‘s GDP. On one hand, the
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percentage
of the IT
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industry
in UK has
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rockected
in the 1998 with12% and reached the highest point of 15%.
On the other hand
,
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service
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industry
has a
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consistently growth
in GDP in 1998 and 2000 with around 7. 7 and 8. 2
respectively
.
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IELTS academic he given bar chart demonstrates the constituents of GDP in the UK for 5 years: 1992, 1994, 1996, 1998, 2000.

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