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harshil pravinbhai gondaliya.

harshil pravinbhai gondaliya. NwKYy
The line graph reveals the information about the birth and death rates in New Zealand in years between 1901 to 2101. To begin with, it can be observed from the chart that in the year 1901 birth rate of the New Zealand was 200 thaousands, additionally, i gone up after 20 years anad settle at 30 thaousand in 1921. Moreover, after that it was sky-rocketed in the next 40 years, and in the year 1961, it was settled in the peak of the graph, and seat near to 65000. Furthermore, after the year 2021, it has countinuously decreases, and settles neart to 40 in the year 2101. On the other hand, death rate of the New Zealand was below 10000 in 1901, After that it was rose with fluctuation and settle at near to 25000 in 2021. Moreover, after 2021 it has countinuously rose and seat at near to 60000. Finally, it can be seen that birth rate was higher in begining but in the end death rate cross it.
The line graph reveals the information about the birth and death
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in New Zealand in years
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between 1901 to 2101
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To
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from the chart that in the
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year
1901 birth
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rate
of the New Zealand was 200
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thaousands
,
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,
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gone up after 20 years
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anad
settle at 30
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thaousand
in 1921.
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, after that it was sky-rocketed in the
next
40 years, and in the
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1961, it
was settled
in the peak of the graph, and seat near to 65000.
Furthermore
, after the
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year
2021, it has
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countinuously
decreases, and settles
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neart
to 40 in the
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year
2101.

On the other hand
, death
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rate
of the New Zealand was below 10000 in 1901, After that it was rose with fluctuation and settle at near to 25000 in 2021.
Moreover
, after 2021 it has
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countinuously
rose and seat at near to 60000.

Finally
, it can be
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seen
that birth
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was higher in
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begining
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in the
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death
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IELTS academic harshil pravinbhai gondaliya.

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170 words
6.0
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