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The table illustrates the proportions of students who studied in different types of schools from 2000 to 2009. Whereas, the community schools become the most important rather than other schools in the same period years. To begin, The percentage of specialist schools were decreasing in order from 2000 to 2009. Secondly, The school of grammar also lost attendance during this time. It had 24% in 2000 but, after few years this proportion of students reached only 12% in 2009. Thirdly, The schools' voluntary-controlled had most important in 2000 and this year the half of the percent of pupils attending but, they lost their importance in 2005 by 14% and, they did not stop here but, also they lost other 18% in 2009. To conclude, Three types of schools loss their superiority during this year. On the other sides, Only one school raised its superiority in the same period.
The table illustrates the proportions of students who studied in
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from 2000 to 2009.
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, the community
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become the most
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rather
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schools
in the same period years.

To
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begin
, The percentage of specialist
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were decreasing in order from 2000 to 2009.
Secondly
, The
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of grammar
also
lost attendance during this time. It had 24% in 2000
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, after few years this proportion of students reached
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12% in 2009.
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in 2000 and this year the half of the percent of pupils attending
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, they lost their importance in 2005 by 14% and, they did not
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here
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,
also
they lost other 18% in 2009.

To conclude
, Three types of
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loss their superiority during this year. On the other sides,
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Only
one
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raised its superiority in the same period.
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IELTS academic gtu b twe j ybd4ewsad juykojkde jytgerzxc jgfvweasx kyubnerre gjytytefb

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3 paragraphs
148 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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