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Global population and chunks of wealth by region.

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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals data for global population and chunks of wealth by region. Overall, the lowest percentage of population is for Rich Asia-Pacific, whereas the biggest index of wealth is for North America. With regard to fraction of North America’s population, it is a mere 5 per cent, however the share of Europe’s population is less than a fifth. The percentages of Indian’s and other Asia Pacific’s population are under a fifth simultaneously. The differences of population chunks of China and other Asia Pacific are great, in fact the population share of China is virtually two times more than the other Asia Pacific’s one. Regarding the distribution rates of states by region, North America’s percentage is the biggest amongst other countries, whilst the lowest one is for two places (India, Africa). Interestingly, the shares of China and other Asia Pacific are under 5 per cent, simultaneously. TASK2 Working of both husband and wife on par is believed to provide family and feel a presence of all necessary needs. Whereas it is justified by a definite circle of individuals, others assume that it causes a shortage of support and care in front of their children. I, nevertheless, hold the belief that if partners are supposed to work simultaneously, they should fill an absence of care by hiring a babysitter or keeping the grandparents of children at home. There is no doubt that providing a family is a quite tough possession, and even one member of family could not be able to arrange this work. In fact, nowadays majority wives attempt to find a job to be treated as volunteers who contribute an additional income to family. Take an instance, most female partners are enough skilled to work somewhere such as in banks, logistic firms, businesses and so on. As we all know, the most vital and obligatory item which is required in work stations is a presence of definite amount of skills. There are quite enough professions which do not distinguish the gender, and even military of states involves lots of female soldiers on the assumption of their talent and passion to that work. As a result, if a leader of family, husband, is fine with his partner’s job, why should not a wife try to help her family in terms of finance. On the other hand, giving birth a child is a great deal of responsibility. In a nutshell, if partners are ready to have an infant and also provide him without needs, it is justified to have children. It, however, does not mean that if a couple does not have enough money to provide their family and children, they should not have them. By contrast, one of the aspects of happy and loving family is living without any needs. So, when partners occasionally work, they could pay attention less to their children, which could even impact on upbringing and behavior of their generation. Not surprisingly, if parents work, they have less spare time to spend with their children. In conclusion, I do believe that if careful partners decided to work together in order to raise their children without needs, they should also take care of behavior and future of them, so they could find someone who will do it instead of them such as babysitter or close
A glance at the bar chart provided reveals data for global
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population
and chunks of wealth by region.
Overall
, the lowest percentage of
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population
is for Rich Asia-Pacific, whereas the biggest index of wealth is for North America.

With regard to fraction of North America’s
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population
, it is a mere 5 per cent,
however
the share of Europe’s
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population
is less than a fifth. The percentages of Indian’s and
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other
Asia Pacific’s
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population
are under a fifth
simultaneously
. The differences of
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population
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chunks
of China and
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other
Asia Pacific are great, in fact the
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population
share of China is
virtually
two times more than the
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other
Asia Pacific’s one.

Regarding the distribution rates of states by region, North America’s percentage is the biggest amongst
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other
countries, whilst the lowest one is for two places (India, Africa).
Interestingly
, the shares of China and
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other
Asia Pacific are under 5 per cent,
simultaneously
.

TASK2

Working of both husband and wife on par
is believed
to provide
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family
and feel a presence of all necessary
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needs
. Whereas it
is justified
by a
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definite
circle of individuals, others assume that it causes a shortage of support and care in front of their
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children
. I,
nevertheless
, hold the belief that if
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partners
are supposed
to
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work
simultaneously
, they should
The usual prepositions to use after "fill" is 'with' not "an" Did you mean "fill an absence with"?
fill an absence of
care by hiring a babysitter or keeping the grandparents of
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children
at home.

There is no doubt that providing a
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family
is a quite tough possession, and even one member of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
could not be able to arrange this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. In fact, nowadays majority wives attempt to find a job to
be treated
as volunteers who contribute an additional income to
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family
. Take an instance, most female
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partners
are
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enough
skilled to
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work
somewhere such as in banks, logistic firms, businesses and
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so
on. As we all know, the most vital and obligatory item which
is required
in
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work
stations is a presence of
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definite
amount of
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skills
. There are quite
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enough
professions which do not distinguish the gender, and even military of states involves lots of female soldiers on the assumption of their talent and passion to that
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work
.
As a result
, if a leader of
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family
, husband, is fine with his
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partner’s
job, why should not a wife try to
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help
her
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family
in terms of finance.

On the
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other
hand, giving birth a child is a great deal of responsibility. In a nutshell, if
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partners
are ready to have an infant and
also
provide him without
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needs
, it
is justified
to have
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children
. It,
however
, does not mean that if a couple does not have
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enough
money to provide their
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family
and
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children
, they should not have them. By contrast, one of the aspects of happy and loving
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family
is living without any
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needs
.
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So
, when
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partners
occasionally
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work
, they could pay attention less to their
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children
, which could even impact on upbringing and behavior of their generation. Not
surprisingly
, if parents
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work
, they have less spare time to spend with their children.

In conclusion
, I do believe that if careful
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partners
decided to
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work
together in order to raise their
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children
without
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needs
, they should
also
take care of behavior and future of them,
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so
they could find someone who will do it
instead
of them such as babysitter or close
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IELTS academic Global population and chunks of wealth by region.

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