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Describing a process that is producing animal skin.

Describing a process that is producing animal skin. oMrw
The diagram illustrates the procedure of producing animal skin and skinny yields. Overall, there are 11 stages until producing skinny products. The process begin when dried animal skin is brought to the factory. After that, before soaking to the tannin which is included water and vegetable matter, then it is washed on water with lime and then it is soaked in lime. After some time, it is flatted. On the next stage, it is polished on the special machine. Over the following stage, all animal skins are gathered and delivered to the other factories that produce yields that are made from animal skin. The process ends with producing skinny products such as shoes and bag.
The diagram illustrates the procedure of producing
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animal
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skin
and skinny yields.
Overall
, there are 11 stages until producing skinny products.

The process
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begin
when dried
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animal
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skin
is brought
to the factory. After that,
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before
soaking to the tannin which
is included
water and vegetable matter, then it
is washed
on water with lime and then it
is soaked
in lime. After
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some
time, it
is flatted
. On the
next
stage, it
is polished
on the special machine. Over the following stage, all
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animal
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skins
are gathered
and delivered to the other factories that produce yields that
are made
from
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animal
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skin
. The process ends with producing skinny products such as shoes and bag.

IELTS academic Describing a process that is producing animal skin.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
115 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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