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Given below is the bar diagram showing the hours spent per week by the students of different age groups on the leisure activities and studies. Write a report for the university lecture in atleast 150 words.

Given below is the bar diagram showing the hours spent per week by the students of different age groups on the leisure activities and studies. Write a report for the university lecture in atleast 150 words. 70gpk
The bar diagram shows us the hours spent per week by the students of different age groups on the leisure activities and studies for the two different age groups that is 10-14 years and 15 to 18 years. The first age group is 10-14 years. The children of this age group spend more time in studies than doing any other activities. They spend 40 hours studying and only 25 hours doing fun. It shows that they are more interested in studies in their young age. They must be particular in doing in their homework on time. The second age group is 15-18 years. Children spend almost equal time in studying and leisure activities that is 40 and 35 hours respectively. This age group has lots of other things to do so, they do not spend their time in leisure activities. It is quite evident from the bar that children change their interests and hobbies according to their growing age.
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in studies than doing any other
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40
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studying and
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25
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doing fun. It
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that they are more interested in studies in their young
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in studying and leisure
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IELTS academic Given below is the bar diagram showing the hours spent per week by the students of different age groups on the leisure activities and studies. Write a report for the university lecture in atleast 150 words.

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