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the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present.

the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present. BwD2X
The given maps illustrate the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present. The general overview here is that the town undergoes a considerable transformation after the construction takes place. According to the first map, it can be seen that in 1983 the city consisted of one main road running from the west to the east with connected to Munster avenue to the southwest, there was a farm situated on the east side of this road and a windmill located on the opposite side, while the main avenue, to the west there were five houses on both side of the street, Next to these, situated to the north was a school, whereas there were a police station and post office located to the south near the river bank which was called river may running from the north to the south. Moreover, the shop was located to the east and there was a huge forest situated on the northeast side of the city. At present, the old houses remain unaffected, but the green area to the northwest is all gone to make room for a new high road, with surround by a new house and connected to the main street. a dame is constructed on the north side of the river. The shop is replaced by an enormous supermarket. Similarly, where the farm stood there is a petrol station and a cafe’ nearby. However, the main facilities of the town remain unchanged.
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maps illustrate the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present. The general overview here is that the town undergoes a considerable transformation after the construction takes place.

According to the
first
map, it can be
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seen
that in 1983 the city consisted of one
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main
road running from the west to the east with connected to Munster avenue to the southwest, there was a farm situated on the east side of this road and a windmill located on the opposite side, while the
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main
avenue, to the west there were five
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houses
on both side of the street,
Next
to these, situated to the north was a school, whereas there were a police station and post office located to the south near the river bank which
was called
river may running from the north to the south.
Moreover
, the shop
was located
to the east and there was a huge forest situated on the northeast side of the city.

At present, the
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old
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houses
remain unaffected,
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but
the green area to the northwest is all gone to
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make
room for a new high road, with surround by a new
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house
and connected to the
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main
street.
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a
dame
is constructed
on the north side of the river. The shop
is replaced
by an enormous supermarket.
Similarly
, where the farm stood there is a petrol station and a
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cafe
’ nearby.
However
, the
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main
facilities of the town remain unchanged.

IELTS academic the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present.

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