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EXPORT EARNINGS 2015-2016

EXPORT EARNINGS 2015-2016 n18K7
The given bar chart provides an information about the ratio of an Export earnings over a period of a year. From the given bar chart, it can be clearly visible that petroleum products has, highest export earnings, whereas textiles has lowest export earnings. Lets us discuss in detail, Overall the fuel export was more and the profit was $61 and $62 billions respectively in 2015-2016 years. secondly engineering goods profit range was $58 and $61 in 2015-2016 years, whereas gems and jewellery has moderate earning in export during those periods and the earning range was $43 billions and $41 billions in 2016 which is slightly less compare to 2015, moreover agriculutural products has similar benefit range in those two years, at last textiles has very less earning in export business $28 billions in 2015 and in 2016 this profit range increased to $3billons and reached upto to $31billions. Inconclusion, petroleum products and engineering goods bar chart profits showing upward direction compare to other kinds of exports.
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over a period of a year.

From the
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bar chart, it can be
clearly
visible that petroleum products has,
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highest
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export
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earnings
, whereas textiles has
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lowest
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export
earnings.

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us discuss in detail,

Overall
the fuel
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export
was more and the
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profit
was $61 and $62
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billions
respectively
in 2015-2016 years.
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secondly
engineering
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goods
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profit
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was $58 and $61 in 2015-2016 years, whereas gems and
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jewellery
has moderate
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earning
in
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during those periods and the
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earning
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range
was $43
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billions
and $41
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billions
in 2016 which is
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moreover
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agriculutural
products has similar benefit
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range
in those two years, at last textiles has
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very
less
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earning
in
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export
business $28
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billions
in 2015 and in 2016 this
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profit
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range
increased to $3billons and reached
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upto
to $31billions.

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Inconclusion
, petroleum products and engineering
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goods
bar chart
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profits
showing upward direction compare to other kinds of
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exports
.
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IELTS academic EXPORT EARNINGS 2015-2016

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  American English
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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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