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Explain why you chose business as your interest field of study

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Digital Business is one of the majors that recently peaks my interest. I knew that this major is something that is new and not many people know about this major, thus does not gain a lot of people's interest, but I personally think Digital Business has a high potential to be more advanced in the future and can definitely impact the modern world since it is interdisciplinary of both business and technology. The reason why I chose this major is that over the past years I started to realize that technology will become one of the most major things that will be beneficial in the future, since then I started to gain interest in that field of study. That being said, I feel that pursuing my undergraduate degree in digital business at TIU would be my best choice. Japan is known for its amalgamation of many different cultures living together in a relatively small area, which is the exact environment that I currently require. I chose TIU’s digital business program as it is the only university in Japan that has a Digital business degree.
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is that over the past years I
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to realize that technology will become one of the most
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things that will be beneficial in the future, since then I
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to gain interest in that field of study. That
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IELTS academic Explain why you chose business as your interest field of study

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