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Exam question The bar chart shows the amount of money spent on two types of electronic items in country X Summarise the information in the chart by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on computers and smartphones in country X between 2011 and 2015. Overall, Both and Smartphones experienced an upward trend thoughout the period. Both countries sales rate had some fluctuations. Smarthphones had no difference on sales for 3 years. Although Smartphones initially had a lower sales, it nearly catched up to the Computers sales at the end of the period. Computers sales was 30 million in 2011, being higher than Smartphones by a large margin, with 20 million. Then it rose about 5 million in 2012. And it didn't end up like this it still continued to rise up. And in 2013 it reached to 40 million sales. In addition, in 2015 it hit the highest point when it was compared to the previous years. Sales for Smartphones in 2011 was 10 million and it didn't remain any difference till 2014. However, it experienced a rapid growth during the next 2 years. It rose to 30 million sales in 2014, then increased by around 15 million in 2015. Being the highest sale of all years.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on computers and smartphones in country X between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
, Both and Smartphones experienced an upward trend
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thoughout
the period. Both countries
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sales
rate had
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some
fluctuations.
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Smarthphones
had no difference on
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sales
for 3 years. Although Smartphones
initially
had a lower
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sales
, it
nearly
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catched
up to the Computers
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sales
at the
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end
of the period. Computers
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sales
was 30
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million
in 2011, being higher than Smartphones by a large margin, with 20
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million
. Then it rose about 5
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million
in 2012. And it didn't
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end
up like this it
still
continued to rise up. And in 2013 it reached to 40
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million
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sales
.
In addition
, in 2015 it hit the highest point when it
was compared
to the previous years.
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Sales
for Smartphones in 2011 was 10
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million
and it didn't remain any difference till 2014.
However
, it experienced a rapid growth during the
next
2 years. It rose to 30
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million
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sales
in 2014, then increased by around 15
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million
in 2015. Being the highest
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sale
of all years.
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IELTS academic Exam question The bar chart shows the amount of money spent on two types of electronic items in country X

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