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3) a glance at the graph provided reveals some striking similarities between the Public and Self-employed sector's employment rates during the period from 2000 to 2010. The public sector began at just under 40 percent, after which it witnessed some fluctuations during 2003 to 2005 around 45 percent, and Then there was a slight upward trend in this sector during the last 5 years to somewhere about 52 percent. The self-employed sector began with minimal growth. Despite a steady fall, it underwent a remarkable increase to 30 percent in 2009 and 2010. the private sector plunged dramatically from approximately 48 percent to 20 percent Over a ten-year period, during which it levelled off at roughly 40 percent for two years between 2002 and 2003.
3) a glance at the graph provided reveals
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striking similarities between the Public and Self-employed sector's employment rates during the period from 2000 to 2010. The public
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began at
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fluctuations during 2003 to 2005 around 45
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, and Then there was a slight upward trend in this
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during the last 5 years to somewhere about 52
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. The self-employed
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began with minimal growth. Despite a steady fall, it underwent a remarkable increase to 30
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in 2009 and 2010.
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