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Electricity deman and used in Britain

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The different of daily demand of electricity between summer an winter is presented in graph below while the utilization of electricity is showed bt the pie chart. In general electricity comsumtion in winter are twice higher than summer and reach the peak close to midnight and lowest consumption at early morning. In contrast, the highest demand for electricity occured at the day time at summer. This different might occure due to fact that a huge amount of energy needed for heating the house throught winter. Most of electricity in England household was utilized for heating either to rise room temperature or boiling water which is 52. 5% from total expend. The total comsumption for lighting, TV and Radio were about 15% which is exactly the same with the total expand for Vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools and about 2. 5% higher tha the demand forOven Kattles and washing machines. In conclusion, the deman for electricity in Engalad was depend of season and most osf the were used for heating eather water or entire house.
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In general
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comsumtion
in winter are twice higher than summer and reach the peak close to midnight and lowest consumption at early morning.
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, the highest demand for
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due to fact that a huge amount of energy needed for heating the
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winter. Most of
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in England household
was utilized
for heating either to rise room temperature or boiling water which is 52. 5% from total expend. The total
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comsumption
for lighting, TV and Radio were about 15% which is exactly the same with the total expand for Vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools and about 2. 5% higher
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the demand
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forOven
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Kattles
and washing machines.
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, the
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deman
for
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in
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Engalad
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the were
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