Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Doctors say that people are doing less physical activity nowadays. What are the causes for this and what can be the solution. Give suitable example from your knowledge and experience.

Doctors say that people are doing less physical activity nowadays. What are the causes for this and what can be the solution. Give suitable example from your knowledge and experience. dk2g7
It is being said by some medical professionals that individuals are not including any exercise in their schedules nowadays. There might be several reasons to avoid and numerous ways to include it in the schedule. Firstly, people are working from home nowadays which has changed the complete schedule of every individuals. People are working till late night and waking up late in the morning due to this they do not get time for their fitness. Secondly, people who usually go to office earlier, had to walk to the parking to park their vehicles and to their work stations. Lastly, there is no social gathering hence people are not aware that they are gaining weight and loosing their stemina. Individuals should prepare a time table for them and include sometime for the exercise in that. They are saving time as no need to travel to office which can be utilized for activities like cycling, running, walking. They can include any sport in their routine which can fill them with the energy and will help to release the stress of work. One of my good friend works for an IT company. His shift starts at 12: 00 pm and ends at 9: 00 pm which generally extends till 11: 00 pm. He usually go to the bed late around 1: 00 am and wakeup at 10: 00 am in the morning. He does not have the time for exercise due to his busy schedule. Consequently, his backbone disk space is reduced because of long sitting and he gained 10 kg of weight in last 6 months. Now he has consulted an orthopedics and planning to include a morning walk before his office starts. It is sensible to conclude that one should include some workout in one's free time for healthy life.
It is
being said
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
medical professionals that individuals are not including any exercise in their schedules nowadays. There might be several reasons to avoid and numerous ways to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
include
it in the schedule.

Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are working from home nowadays which has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the complete schedule of every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "individual"?
individuals
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
are working till late night and waking up late in the morning due to this they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for their fitness.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
usually
go to office earlier, had to walk to the parking to park their vehicles and to their work stations.
Lastly
, there is no social gathering
hence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are not aware that they are gaining weight and loosing their
Possible spelling mistake found.
stemina
.

Individuals should prepare a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
table for them and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
include
sometime for the exercise in that. They are saving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
as no need to travel to office which can
be utilized
for activities like cycling, running, walking. They can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
include
any sport in their routine which can fill them with the energy and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to release the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
of work.

One of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
friend works for an IT
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. His shift
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
at 12: 00 pm and ends at 9: 00 pm which
generally
extends till 11: 00 pm. He
usually
The pronoun 'He' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "goes", "went".
go
to the bed late around 1: 00 am and
Possible spelling mistake found.
wakeup
at 10: 00
This is redundant. Consider using "am".
am in the morning
. He does not have the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for exercise due to his busy schedule.
Consequently
, his backbone disk space is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of long
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
sitting and
he gained 10 kg of weight in last 6 months.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
he has consulted an orthopedics and planning to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
include
a morning walk
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
his office
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
.

It is sensible
to conclude
that one should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
include
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
workout in one's free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for healthy life.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic Doctors say that people are doing less physical activity nowadays. What are the causes for this and what can be the solution. Give suitable example from your knowledge and experience.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Doctors say that people are doing less physical activity nowadays. What are the causes for this and what can be the solution. Give suitable example from your knowledge and experience.