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Diagram of how cacao is made

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As everyone knows chocolate always is one of the most popular ingredients which is used to create sweet food. Hence, not all of them know the progress in making chocolate, so what is it come from? The diagram shows you the stages that chocolate has been made, chocolate comes from a kind of vegetal named Cocoa that lived in South America, Africa, Indonesia. Then it takes a couple of months to harvest. After that, the beans from the fruit will be fermented, but that is not the end. The farmer will take them to spread in sun to make sure that they will dry to a certain stage. They will put it into large sacks after the previous step. Then, all of the cocoa that has been spread in the sun transport to the factory by train or larry. We continue with the process stage, the cocoa beans will be roasted at 350 degrees celsius, then the worker divide them into 2 parts: the beans crushed and outer shell removed. Most of the progress in making chocolate almost finish, the final step pressed the inner part and the liquid chocolate was produced.

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