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contribution of different industrial sectors towards economy of Turkey in year 2000 and 2016.

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These pie chart shows the contribution of different industrial sectors towards economy of Turkey in year 2000 and 2016. Overall it can be observed that Agriculture was the most significant sector during year 2000 whereas construction contributes the least in the same year. However in 2016 health care and education sector holds the largest contribution but on the other hand contribution from finance, business and other sector was the least significant. During this time period from 2000 to 2016 construction sector increased significantly by 7% whereas Manufacturing sector went from 8% to 12% respectively. On the other hand trade utilities and transportation sector contributed only 2% more in 16 years, further finance, business and other sector showed a 3% surge in the same time period. However Government sector contributions declined from 12% to 9% and the similar sort of drop in Turkey, s economy was observed in Lesiure and hospitality sector which declined by 3%. Healthcare and Educations sector showed the same contribution of 17% from 2000 till 2016.
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