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compares the changes in the proportion of urban population amongst 3 continents and the entirety of the world

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The bar graph compares the changes in the proportion of urban population amongst 3 continents and the entirety of the world from 1950-2000, as well as giving an estimated figure for 2030. Overall, the study period witnessed an upward trend in the percentage of people living in towns and cities in all research areas, forecasting a continuous growth until 2020. Notably, Latin America constituted the highest number of urban populations, contrary to the lowest number for Africa across the period. Particularly, America/Caribbean accounted for 41% of the total population in 1950, then undergoing a remarkable increase of 29% until 2000, and expected to soar up to 80% in 2030. Noticeably, the figures for Latin America/Caribbean were and will always be higher than that of the world, and the most considerable gap was observed in 2000 (around 23%). Meanwhile, in 1950, Asia and Africa accounted for 14% and 12% of the people living in cities, respectively, before both going up to 37% in 2000, and continuing to rise up by 19% and 14% in 2030. Furthermore, these figures, constituting the lowest numbers across the given period, were and will always be below the total number of the world.
The bar graph compares the
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in the proportion of urban population amongst 3 continents and the entirety of the world from 1950-2000,
as well
as giving an estimated figure for 2030.

Overall
, the study period witnessed an upward trend in the percentage of
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people
living in towns and cities in all research areas, forecasting a continuous growth until 2020.
Notably
, Latin America constituted the highest
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of urban populations, contrary to the lowest
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for Africa across the period.

Particularly
, America/Caribbean accounted for 41% of the total population in 1950, then undergoing a remarkable increase of 29% until 2000, and
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expected
to soar up to 80% in 2030.
Noticeably
, the figures for Latin America/Caribbean were and will always be higher than that of the world, and the most considerable gap
was observed
in 2000 (around 23%).

Meanwhile, in 1950, Asia and Africa accounted for 14% and 12% of the
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living in cities,
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both going up to 37% in 2000, and continuing to rise up by 19% and 14% in 2030.
Furthermore
, these figures, constituting the lowest
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numbers
across the
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period, were and will always be below the total
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of the world.
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IELTS academic compares the changes in the proportion of urban population amongst 3 continents and the entirety of the world

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