Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

chart of British people contributing to charity of different age groups in 1990 and 2010.

chart of British people contributing to charity of different age groups in 1990 and 2010. 9wqWr
British people of different age groups providing money for charityin two different years is depicted in the chart. overall some age groups involved the most in charity while, some age groups provided least. Analyzing the data group group rangeing from 31-50 accounted the highest persent in 1990, but reduced to 35 percent in 2010. Furthermore age group from 51- 65 contributed around 35% to charity which further surged to 40% by 2010. In 1990, group 26-35 and above 65 contributed the same amount around 35%, but age group 26- 35 dropped it's value to 24 percent in 2010. Where, the contribution of age group greater than 65 slightly raised to 35% in 2010. To continue, the category of people who accounted the least percent was 18 - 25 age groups, which contributed 18 percent in 1990, but dramatically dropped its value by 8 percent in 2010. Hence, age group 15- 65 ranked the highest percent among all the age groups, while group 18-25 accounted the least.
British
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
providing money for
Possible spelling mistake found.
charityin
two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
years
is depicted
in the chart.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
overall
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
involved the most in charity while,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
provided least.

Analyzing the data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
Possible spelling mistake found.
rangeing
from 31-50 accounted the highest
Possible spelling mistake found.
persent
in 1990,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
to 35
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 2010.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 51 to 65"?
from 51- 65
contributed around 35% to charity which
further
surged to 40% by 2010. In 1990,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
26-35 and above 65 contributed the same amount around 35%,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
26- 35
dropped
Did you mean "its" (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?
it's
value to 24
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 2010.
“Where” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Where
, the contribution of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
greater than 65
slightly
raised to 35% in 2010.

To continue, the category of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who accounted the least
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
was
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
18 - 25
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
, which contributed 18
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1990,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
dramatically
dropped its value by 8
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 2010.

Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
15- 65
ranked the highest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
among all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
, while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
18-25 accounted the least.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic chart of British people contributing to charity of different age groups in 1990 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
166 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • chart of British people contributing to charity of different age groups in 1990 and 2010.