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Chart below shows the proportion of holidaymakers using three different types of accommodation in three years

Chart below shows the proportion of holidaymakers using three different types of accommodation in three years R9PQ
The given Pie Charts illustrate the percentage of holidaymakers who used various types of accommodations such as hotels, camping and stay with family and friends between 1988 and 2008. Over all, it can be clear from the chart that proportion of staying with family and friends decreased in following decades. While percentage of holiday makers who preferred camping and hotels were increased every 10 years. According to the chart in 1988 over a half holiday makers who stayed with the family and friends while this ratio fell down in 1998 at nearly half in same accommodation. In 2008 debt ratio decreased and reached 38%. By contrast in 1988 26% of Travellers preferred hotel. That ratio increased 29% in 1998 and 48% in 2008 respectively. Similarly MP solid the same trend like hotels. Proportion of camping escalated in 1998 at 12% and reached 14% in 2008.
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Pie Charts illustrate the percentage of holidaymakers who
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various types of accommodations such as
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hotels
, camping and stay with family and friends between 1988 and 2008.

Over all, it can be
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clear
from the chart that proportion of staying with family and friends decreased in following decades. While percentage of holiday makers who preferred camping and
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hotels
were increased
every 10 years.

According to the chart in 1988 over a half holiday makers who stayed with the family and friends while this ratio fell down in 1998 at
nearly
half in same accommodation. In 2008 debt ratio decreased and reached 38%. By contrast in 1988 26% of
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Travellers
preferred
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hotel
. That ratio increased 29% in 1998 and 48% in 2008
respectively
.
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Similarly
MP solid the same trend
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like
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hotels
. Proportion of camping escalated in 1998 at 12% and reached 14% in 2008.

IELTS academic Chart below shows the proportion of holidaymakers using three different types of accommodation in three years

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