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Các biểu đồ dưới đây cho thấy mức tiêu thụ năng lượng của Vương quốc Anh và Hoa Kỳ trong năm 2000 và 2006. Tóm tắt thông tin bằng cách chọn và báo cáo các đặc điểm chính, đồng thời so sánh nếu có liên quan.

Các biểu đồ dưới đây cho thấy mức tiêu thụ năng lượng của Vương quốc Anh và Hoa Kỳ trong năm 2000 và 2006. Tóm tắt thông tin bằng cách chọn và báo cáo các đặc điểm chính, đồng thời so sánh nếu có liên quan. KGWYL
The chart demonstrates data about how much energy which was expenditure from five different sources(oil, coal, gas, nuclear power and other renewable sources) in the United Kingdom and the United State in 2000 and 2006. Overall, oil was the most popular energy in America in two different years, while the British tended to favor coal in 2000 and it was gas in 2006. Looking at the details, as regards the percentage of energy consumed in 2000 and 2006, oil and coal was more popular in the USA than Britain. The amount of oil witnessed a slight incease after six years. However, the figure for coal fell dramatically between 2000 and 2006 from approximately 29 percent to 13 percent in the UK and from nearly 34 percent to 23 percent in the US. By contrast, the proportion of three other energy was not used as much in the US as in the England in both years. Gas was a sharp rise from 20 percent to 39 in the Great Britain and from 15 percent to 24 percent in the United State in 2000 and 2006. The figure for nuclear power declined gradual in two contries. Americans deceased using other renewable sources by around 2 percent, from 6 percent in 2000 to 4 percent in 2006. Whereas, these energy was a grow in the United Kingdom between 2000 and 2006.
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years, while the British tended to favor coal in 2000 and it was gas in 2006.

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IELTS academic Các biểu đồ dưới đây cho thấy mức tiêu thụ năng lượng của Vương quốc Anh và Hoa Kỳ trong năm 2000 và 2006. Tóm tắt thông tin bằng cách chọn và báo cáo các đặc điểm chính, đồng thời so sánh nếu có liên quan.

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