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Business Talk Series IPB - Solusi Perekonomian Penanganan Pandemi Covid 19 Menghadapi Tantangan Akuntabilitas, Fleksibilitas, Kecepatan, dan Risiko Kebijakan Pemulihan Ekonomi Nasional

Business Talk Series IPB - Solusi Perekonomian Penanganan Pandemi Covid 19 Menghadapi Tantangan Akuntabilitas, Fleksibilitas, Kecepatan, dan Risiko Kebijakan Pemulihan Ekonomi Nasional eKqRp

The maps illustrate the development of a city from 1995 to the present. Overall, the city has undergone dramatic changes in terms of housing, structure and facilities. On the other hand, the sea, most part of the main roads in the city, the café and the hotel remained the same over the period shown. In 1995, there was an area of farmland area to the north-east of the citynext to a forest park that years later gave place to a golf course and tennis courts. In addition, morehouseswere built next to the main road. In regard tothe facilities, some of them were replaced. For example, in the area where the fish market to the south-west was located, some apartments were built. Moreover, the shop was replaced by a restaurant. Furthermore, the fishing port was removed and a car park was built next to the hotel in the south-east of the city. Another change that occurred was the extension of the road in the residential area.

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, the city has undergone dramatic This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 in terms of housing, structure and facilities. On the other hand
, the sea, most part of the main roads in the city, the café and the hotel remained the same over the period shown.

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area
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area
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some
 of them were replaced
. For example
, in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 where the fish market to the south-west was located
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 apartments were built
. Moreover
, the shop was replaced
 by a restaurant. Furthermore
, the fishing port was removed
 and a car park was built
next
 to the hotel in the south-east of the city. Another This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 that occurred was the extension of the road in the residential You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
. 

IELTS academic Business Talk Series IPB - Solusi Perekonomian Penanganan Pandemi Covid 19 Menghadapi Tantangan Akuntabilitas, Fleksibilitas, Kecepatan, dan Risiko Kebijakan Pemulihan Ekonomi Nasional

Academic

American English

3 paragraphs

165 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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