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Bar chart writing academic task 1

Bar chart writing academic task 1 2K12X
The below bar chart provides information on hours spent in a week by adolescents/youth/teens/children/kids/ in Chester performing specific activities between the years 2002 to 2007. Broadly speaking, throghout the given years watching television is one of the main activities performed by teens where bowling was the activity which wasn't favoured by many. Visiting pubs/discos along with shopping and watching television are the few activities which steadily increased over the years apart from other activities. Teenagers in 2002 spent 25 hours watching TV which then increased to 38 hours in the final year, while going to pubs and discos along with shopping more than doubled in hours in the given period from over 7 to 18 and from over 7 to 15 respectively. While teenagers spent about 12 hours a week doing homework in 2002 which nearly halved till the year 2007 on the contrary watching DVD increased from 10 hours in 2002 to 15 and 17 hours in years 2003 and 2004 respectively and further decreased slightly in the next three years. In year 2002 total of 10 hours were spent on playing sports which dramatically decreased to 3 hours in the final year of the given period. Bowling was one of the activities which stayed below five hours throughout the given period and only reduced by 4 hours in total.
The below bar chart provides information on
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spent
in a week by adolescents/youth/teens/children/kids/ in Chester performing specific
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activities
between the years 2002 to 2007.

Broadly
speaking,
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throghout
the
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given
years watching television is one of the main
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activities
performed by teens where bowling was the
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activity
which wasn't
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favoured
by
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many
. Visiting pubs/discos along with shopping and watching television are the few
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activities
which
steadily
increased over the years apart from other activities.

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Teenagers
in 2002
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spent
25
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hours
watching TV which then increased to 38
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hours
in the final
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year
, while going to pubs and discos along with shopping more than doubled in
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hours
in the
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given
period from over 7 to 18 and from over 7 to 15
respectively
.

While
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teenagers
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spent
about 12
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hours
a week doing homework in 2002 which
nearly
halved till the
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year
2007
on the contrary
watching DVD increased from 10
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hours
in 2002 to 15 and 17
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hours
in years 2003 and 2004
respectively
and
further
decreased
slightly
in the
next
three years. In
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year
2002 total of 10
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hours
were
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spent
on playing sports which
dramatically
decreased to 3
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hours
in the final
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year
of the
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given
period. Bowling was one of the
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activities
which stayed below five
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hours
throughout the
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given
period and
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only
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reduced
by 4
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hours
in total.
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IELTS academic Bar chart writing academic task 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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