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Bar chart showing the consumer goods from the year 2009-2012

Bar chart showing the consumer goods from the year 2009-2012 WYB6N
Introduction: the bar chart illustrates the goods from the year 2009-2012Overview: the chart highlights the importance of products and services in different years, the initial year saw an increase in cosmetic goods and commercial goods Paragraph: in terms of beauty products, they were at a rise in 2012, the other goods were decreasing at a small pace, in terms of the year 2010, both the services were high initially
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from the
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2009-2012Overview: the chart highlights the importance of products and services in
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years, the initial
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year
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an increase in cosmetic
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goods
and commercial
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goods
Paragraph: in terms of beauty products, they were at a rise in 2012, the other
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goods
were decreasing at a
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small
pace, in terms of the
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2010, both the services were high
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IELTS academic Bar chart showing the consumer goods from the year 2009-2012

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  American English
1 paragraphs
68 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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