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Bar chart essay with a graph

Bar chart essay with a graph rbEn6

In this graph is indicated three dissimilar museums including: New-York, Edo-Tokyo, National China which had been visited by sightseers in the first half of the decade between 2000-2005. Overall, it’s perfectly clean that the number of travellers of all three museums witnessed a considerable upward, as regards National China increased steadily year on year. After some time they hitted a peak in the first half of the decade. Turning to details, National China figure started from 6 million visitors in 2000 the there were considerable rise in 2002. Moreover, interesting point is that index was almost the same between 2003-2004. Following this, the number of visitors significantly plummeted and rocket to just under 16 million which meant that it had the highest rate during the whole period. Regarding the visitors of Edo-Tokyo started from 13, 5 million which was the largest average in that year and then they fall sharply in 2003. After some time they recovered whereas sightseers of New-York were starting grow and then visitors fluctuated and recovered.

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 three dissimilar museums including: New-York, Possible spelling mistake found.
Edo-Tokyo
, National China which had been visited
 by sightseers in the first
 half of the decade between 2000-2005.

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, it’s perfectly
 clean that the number of Possible spelling mistake found.travelers
travellers
 of all three museums witnessed a considerable upward, as regards National China increased steadily
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.year-on-year
year on year
. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 time they Possible spelling mistake found.fittedhitterhintedpittedwittedhatted
hitted
 a peak in the first
 half of the decade.

Turning to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
, National China figure This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 from 6 million You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
 in 2000 the there were considerable rise in 2002. Moreover
, interesting point is that index was almost the same between 2003-2004. Following this, the number of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
significantly
 plummeted and rocket to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 under 16 million which meant that it had the highest rate during the whole period.

Regarding the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
 of Possible spelling mistake found.
Edo-Tokyo
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started
 from 13, 5 million which was the largest average in that Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).year, and
year and
 then they fall sharply
 in 2003. After This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 time they recovered whereas sightseers of New-York were starting grow and then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
 fluctuated and recovered. 