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Average monthly rainfall and temperature

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The line graph and bar chart illustrate the mean rainfall and temperature in a month for a period of a year in part of East Africa. Overall, it is clear that there is a direct link between the average temperature and rainfall and both of them show fluctuation throughout the 12-month period. First of all, the most noticeable feature of the line graph is that the temperature reaches the first peak in March and second in October (just above 23. 5°C and well over 23. 0°C respectively). The next striking feature of this graph is the temperature has the lowest point in July which is approximately 20. 5°C. To compare, the temperature over the time frame, it is apparent that temperature in December is lower than that in January (around 21. 5°C and 22. 0°C respectively). Turning to the bar graph, we can see the peak of mean rainfall of the year is in April which is the overall highest peak and in November with the figure around 275mm and 150mm correspondingly. The lowest rainfall of the year falls in July with just under 25mm. Not forgetting to mention that, there is more rainfall in the first six months of the year than months after July.
The line
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graph
and bar chart illustrate the mean
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rainfall
and
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temperature
in a
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month
for a period of a
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year
in part of East Africa.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that there is a direct link between the average
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temperature
and
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rainfall
and both of them
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show
fluctuation throughout the
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12-month
period.

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First of all
, the most noticeable feature of the line
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graph
is that the
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temperature
reaches the
first
peak in March and second in October (
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just
above 23.
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5°C
and well over 23.
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0°C
respectively
). The
next
striking feature of this
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graph
is the
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temperature
has the lowest point in July which is approximately 20.
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5°C
. To compare, the
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temperature
over the time frame, it is apparent that
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temperature
in December is lower than that in January (around 21.
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5°C
and 22.
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0°C
respectively
).

Turning to the bar
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graph
, we can
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see
the peak of mean
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rainfall
of the
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year
is in April which is the
overall
highest peak and in November with the figure around
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275mm
and
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150mm
correspondingly
. The lowest
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rainfall
of the
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year
falls in July with
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just
under
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25mm
. Not forgetting to mention that, there is more
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rainfall
in the
first
six
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months
of the
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year
than
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months
after July.
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IELTS academic Average monthly rainfall and temperature

Academic
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3 paragraphs
206 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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