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Australian teenagers amount and type of consumption fast food

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The Graph gives information about consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers from 1975 until 2000. Overall, It is clear that the number of times adolescents eat fish and chips declined during given period. However, that of pizza and hamburger experienced significant grows until 2000. Both number of pizza and hamburgers started from lower than 10 times in 1975. the both followed a similar pattern and grows during next 20 years. It can be seen that hamburgers has more populity than pizza all the time in giving research. In 1995 the number of ham surge to 100 and that of pizza raise to near 85. both experienced stable period in last 5 years of the study. as for fish and chips, the reported number was as high as 100 times which is the highest reported number on first year. following 5 years this number reduce to just about 80. 5 years later this figure experienced a slight growth and reached to 85. however in the next years of study this number plummeted to 40 times as the least reported number in the last year
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food by Australian
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from 1975 until 2000.

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of
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adolescents eat fish and chips declined during
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, that of pizza and hamburger experienced significant grows until 2000.

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of pizza and hamburgers
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from lower than 10
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in 1975.
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that hamburgers has more
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than pizza all the
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in giving research. In 1995 the
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of ham surge to 100 and that of pizza raise to near 85.
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for fish and chips, the reported
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was as high as 100
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5 years this
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about 80. 5 years later this figure experienced a slight growth and reached to 85.
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plummeted to 40
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IELTS academic Australian teenagers amount and type of consumption fast food

Academic
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183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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