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amount of money spent on charity

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the pie chart illustrate the amount of revenue and expenditures for a infants charity in USA. overall, the total amount of income was enough to fulfill the expenditures moreover donation of food made the highest part of total income while the maximum amount of money spent on program service at first it is vivid that the donation of food makes the huge part of revenue for charity at 86. 6%. similarly program services takes the major expenditure calculated nearly at 95. 8 % the other categories were much smaller. community contribution were second largest income source calculated 10. 4 % and this was followed by program revenue at 2. 2 % on the other hand investment income governments grants and other income were very smaller source of revenue accounting for only 0. 8 % combined there were only two expenditure items fund raising and management and general was accounted at 2. 6% and 1. 6 % respectively.
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and
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expenditures
for
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a
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charity
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overall
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to fulfill the
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expenditures
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donation of food made the highest part of

total
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income
while the maximum amount of money spent on program service

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at
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is vivid that the donation of food
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makes
the huge part of
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for charity at 86. 6%.
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similarly
program services
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takes


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the
major
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calculated
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at 95. 8 % the other categories were much smaller.
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community
contribution were second largest

income source calculated 10. 4 % and this
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by program
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revenue
at 2. 2 %
on the other hand
investment
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grants

and other
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were
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smaller source of
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0. 8 % combined

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two
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fund raising
and management and general
was accounted
at 2. 6% and 1. 6 %
respectively
.
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