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Age group activities for the children in different age groups

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The table shows the results of a survey in which people aged 16 and over have been asked whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Firstly, out of 6800 Scottish adults the most different types of performances including dancing, singing and acting were done by the age group (16-24) which is 35% and visual arts the second most at 30%. The undertaking of crafts and cultural purchases includes same participation with both being 11% and computer-based activities being 10% and writing being 17% for the age group (16-24). Secondly, age group (45-74) have been least interested in participating for writing and computer-based activities with both just 5%. All people aged 16 and over have been actively participating in dancing, singing and acting activities with 22% surprisingly. All people aged 16 and over have been least interested in participating in computer-based activities with as few as 6% dramatically. In the end the people in different age groups had different choices in participating for different activities and mostly youngsters participated the most in all activities individually.
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(16-24) which is 35% and visual arts the second most at 30%. The undertaking of crafts and cultural
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IELTS academic Age group activities for the children in different age groups

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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