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Academic Task 1 – Type 1 – Graph with a Time Period

Academic Task 1 – Type 1 – Graph with a Time Period pJ71a
The graph illustrates us information of earning level of three bakeries in london over 10 years period from 2000 to 2010. In general, It can be seen that yearly income of robies bakery and burns bakery upward while trend of lovely bakeries downward. To begin with, robies bakery remained stable at 55000 pound from 2005 to 2000. Subsequently, robies bakery drastically cross the lovely bakery in 2006 and reached at the top 1000 pound in 2010. As the burnie bakery had lowest income 20000 pounds in 20000. Consequently, It's figure touch dramatically 4000 pounds over three year period from 2000 to 2003. After that there income remained stable for three years and increased quickly over 60000 pounds in 2010. The income of lovely bakeries was the highest 80000 in 2000. It fluctuates first four year and had a great drop down which means that they had lowest income of all three bakeries.
The graph illustrates us information of earning level of three bakeries in
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london
over 10 years period from 2000 to 2010.

In general
, It can be
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seen
that yearly
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income
of
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robies
bakery and burns bakery upward while trend of lovely bakeries downward.

To
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begin
with,
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robies
bakery remained stable at
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55000 pound
from 2005 to 2000.
Subsequently
,
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robies
bakery
drastically
cross the lovely bakery in 2006 and reached at the top
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1000 pound
in 2010.
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As
the
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burnie
bakery had
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lowest
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income
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20000 pounds
in 20000.
Consequently
, It's figure touch
dramatically
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4000 pounds
over three
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year
period from 2000 to 2003. After that there
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income
remained stable for three years and increased
quickly
over
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60000 pounds
in 2010.

The
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income
of lovely bakeries was the highest 80000 in 2000. It fluctuates
first
four
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year
and had a great
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drop down
which means that they had
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lowest
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income
of all three bakeries.
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IELTS academic Academic Task 1 – Type 1 – Graph with a Time Period

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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