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a process diagram of apple juice production.

a process diagram of apple juice production. YgWoN
The given process describes the production of apple juice. This is a man made process. A quick look is enough to see that the whole procedure contains eleven steps for producing juice from apples and each step is must for completion of manufacturing. The process begins with the harvesting and selection of best apples. In the next step, fruits are placed on a moving belt to go for washing and sorting. Later on, washed apples collected into a container for grinding. Just after this, the grind material is put into a pressing machines where centrifuger is used to remove the water out of apple concentration. Then, aroma is mixed up into the apple syrup to provide better results. Following this, the prepared liquid go through filtration afterwards pasteurization at 80 temperature. Next, the prepared juice is filled into various bottles and went for packing. Finally, the packages of apple juice transported to the market for sale.
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describes
the production of
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apple
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juice
. This is a
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man
made process. A quick look is
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enough
to
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see
that the whole procedure contains eleven steps for producing
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juice
from
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apples
and each step is
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must
for completion of manufacturing.

The process
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begins
with the harvesting and selection
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of best
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apples
. In the
next
step, fruits
are placed
on a moving belt to go for washing and sorting. Later on, washed
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apples
collected into a container for grinding.
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Just
after this, the grind material
is put
into a pressing machines where
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centrifuger
is
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used
to remove the water out of
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apple
concentration.

Then, aroma
is mixed
up into the
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apple
syrup to provide better results. Following this, the prepared liquid go through filtration afterwards pasteurization at 80 temperature.
Next
, the prepared
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juice
is filled
into various bottles and went for packing.
Finally
, the packages of
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apple
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juice
transported to the market for sale.
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IELTS academic a process diagram of apple juice production.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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