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A horror movie I have watched

A horror movie I have watched BgPAa
Although 80% of the people living on the earth don't really like horror movies, they do watch sometimes. Admittedly, I'm one of the top men who really afraid to watch but do so. To be make sure, I found a movie poster on Channel Myanmar which is a website from which we can download every movie we saw on it. Definitely, that was a horrible one. I watched the trailer and I thought it was not that scary, and I was wrong. I watched it in the day time as I was utterly terrifying. How would you do that at night if you were me? After passing over 25 minutes, I thought I never should have watch it ever. I can't even fully describe how terribly that was. Every scene is so dangerous for me to take my covering hands above my eyes off. My fully bright room couldn't even save me. Suddenly, I heard a sound from credit scene although I haven't watched a single plot yet. Thus, I decided to re-watch it again. Now, curiosity could overcome my tentative mind. Therefore, I brought my supper to the table, so I could turn my eyes to it by the time the ghost appeared. The movie was about the revenge of a girl with extremely grieved outrages. To be exact about it, she was rapped and murdered by a group of four desperate young men. So, she came back to kill them all. After reaching to the place where they did to the girl again, they were murdered one after another, unfortunately. Inescapably, they all died and they deserve it. Although I watched it till the end, I was and am still afraid to watch horror movies. I would like to taste some movies like that if I have a chance in coming future.
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, they do
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sometimes
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men
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do
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. To be
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movie
poster on Channel Myanmar which is a website from which we can download every
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movie
we
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saw
on it. Definitely, that was a horrible one. I
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watched
the trailer and I
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thought
it was not that scary, and I was
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wrong
. I
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watched
it in the day time as I was
utterly
terrifying. How would you do that at night if you were me?

After passing over 25 minutes, I
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thought
I never should have
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watch
it ever. I can't even
fully
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describe
how
terribly
that was. Every scene is
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so
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dangerous
for me to take my covering hands above my eyes off. My
fully
bright room couldn't even save me.
Suddenly
, I heard a sound from credit scene although I haven't
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watched
a single plot
yet
.
Thus
, I decided to re-
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watch
it again.
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Now
, curiosity could overcome my tentative mind.
Therefore
, I brought my supper to the table,
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so
I could turn my eyes to it by the time the ghost appeared. The
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movie
was about the revenge of a girl with
extremely
grieved outrages. To be exact about it, she
was rapped
and murdered by a group of four desperate young
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men
.
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So
, she came back to kill them all. After reaching to the place where they did to the girl again, they
were murdered
one after another, unfortunately.
Inescapably
, they all
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died
and they deserve it. Although I
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watched
it till the
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end
, I was and am
still
afraid to
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watch
horror
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movies
. I would like to taste
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some
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movies
like that if I have a chance in coming future.
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IELTS academic A horror movie I have watched

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2 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
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