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As a child, I was known as a playful, curious, and often troublemaker girl, and I was only calm and quiet when the adults were answering my many questions. Questions like "how do remote controllers work? " or "how do bulbs produce light? ". On summer nights, my father would tell me magical stories about constellations. It was the time when I became fascinated by the wonders of nature. During elementary and high school, although I lived in a slum area with limited facilities, I was selected as the best student each year due to my deep aptitude for Mathematics and Physics. Succeeding that, I was accepted to study bachelor's degree in the best university in my city. Studying Mechanical Engineering was my choice to continue my academic life. Because I considered Mechanical Engineering to be a link between Nature and Mathematics. There is a famous saying: Mechanics is the paradise of Mathematics. Familiarity with specialized software in the field of Mechanical Engineering and working on various course projects were among the integral part of the activities I did in my undergraduate period. For example, I started programming with MATLAB from the first year of university and I have been working in this field for almost six years now. Industrial design is also one of the fields that I was very enthusiastic about. I started learning engineering design with Catia and later, I also learned SolidWorks for 3D design. Since I was terribly interested in control science topics, I studied the structure of PLCs and learned their programming for my undergraduate project, and then passed a job training course at the Bistoon Thermal Power Plant, working directly with PLCs. During this period, I got to know the power plant monitoring systems, which was a wonderful experience. In terms of studying, even though I was not the best student in the class, being with motivated students and experienced professors put me in a situation to realize that scientific progress requires not only great aspirations but also continuous study and effort. Therefore, in the last semesters of the university, I was able to improve my grades by increasing my study hours. Consequently, I got accepted for a master's degree in one of the highly-rated universities in Iran. During my master's course, I chose a creative and very capable professor as my supervisor and for about two months I studied more than 50 scientific articles. So, I could find a topic for study and research that not merely suits my interests, but even is one of the challenges of today's world. Since I still have the motivation to discover the laws of nature, I chose to study bio-inspired robots, and during my master's degree, I studied extensively the types of robots that mimic the locomotion of animals. The topic of my master's thesis was on extracting dynamic equations and simulating the motion of a worm-like robot. As a result, I could extend the motion equations of this robot and prove the results of my research by computer software. Toward the end of my master's courses, I realized that control science, followed by intelligence, is an inseparable component of robotics. Therefore, from two years ago until today, I have studied and implemented various control methods and I have published articles in this field. Besides, in the last two years, I have concluded that in addition to studying, working in a profession also has several benefits for me. These include gaining professional experience, the ability to work in a team, and improving social skills. For this purpose, I spent a year designing different parts and printing them with a 3D printer for a group working on soft rehabilitation robots. After that, for about a year, I also headed the mechanic's department of an industrial online store. In this job, I became acquainted with Internet businesses and concepts such as the principles of SEO, marketing, and contracting, about which I had no previous knowledge. As the team leader, I also planned and managed the work of 9 individuals in my group. I currently devote most of my time to study and research. I recently submitted two articles in the field of robotics in the Soft Computing and Automatica journals. At the same time, I am planning to start a new project inspired by my previous work. I this project, I am going to develop dynamic equations of a two-dimensional worm-like robot that is completely designed by myself. For the following reasons, I think I am the right person to participate in this project: • Although my sister is young, she has been suffering from a special type of rheumatoid arthritis for many years and her disease is currently incurable, and this gives me a strong reason to work on your project which benefits humans. • Since I was a member of a team that worked on soft robots with pneumatic actuators used for hand rehabilitation for about a year. I have studied the movement of the joints of the human body. • I am familiar with the governing equations, the locomotion, and the structure of a wide range of bio-robots. • Although my field is not control engineering, I have designed various linear, nonlinear, fuzzy, and industrial control systems and I am fully acquainted with concepts such as uncertainty, disturbance, and noise. • I do believe that consistency is more important than perfection. • I don’t need an in-person reminder for doing my tasks. • As I know from my personal experiences, I am a fast learner. Consequently, I can bravely step out of my comfort zone and do something new as I did before. • I have been a manager. As a result, I am a multi-task and team-oriented person.
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was known
as a playful, curious, and
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often
troublemaker girl, and I was
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only
calm and quiet when the adults were answering my
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many
questions. Questions like
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how do remote controllers
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work
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how do bulbs produce light?
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. On summer nights, my father would
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tell
me magical stories about constellations. It was the time when I became fascinated by the wonders of nature.

During elementary and high school, although I
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lived
in a slum area with limited facilities, I
was selected
as the best student each
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year
due to my deep aptitude for Mathematics and Physics. Succeeding that, I was
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accepted
to
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study
bachelor's degree in the best
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university
in my city. Studying Mechanical
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Engineering
was my choice to continue my academic life.
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Because
I considered Mechanical
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Engineering
to be a link between Nature and Mathematics. There is a
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famous
saying: Mechanics is the paradise of Mathematics.

Familiarity with specialized software in the
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field
of Mechanical
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Engineering
and
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working
on various
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course
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projects
were among the integral part of the activities I did in my undergraduate period.
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, I
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started
programming with MATLAB from the
first
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year
of
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university
and I have been
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working
in this
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field
for almost six years
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now
. Industrial design is
also
one of the
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fields
that I was
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very
enthusiastic about. I
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started
learning
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engineering
design with
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Catia
and later, I
also
learned
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SolidWorks
for 3D design. Since I was
terribly
interested in
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control
science topics, I
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studied
the structure of
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PLCs
and learned their programming for my undergraduate
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project
, and then passed a job training
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course
at the
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Bistoon
Thermal Power Plant,
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working
directly
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PLCs
. During this period, I
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got
to know the power plant monitoring systems, which was a wonderful experience.

In terms of studying,
even though
I was not the best student in the
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class
, being with motivated students and experienced professors put me in a situation to realize that scientific progress requires not
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only
great aspirations
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but
also
continuous
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study
and effort.
Therefore
, in the last semesters of the
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university
, I was able to
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improve
my grades by increasing my
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study
hours.
Consequently
, I
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got
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accepted
for a
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master's
degree in one of the
highly
-rated
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universities
in Iran.

During my
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master's
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course
, I chose a creative and
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very
capable professor as my supervisor and for about two months I
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studied
more than 50 scientific articles.
So
, I could find a topic for
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study
and research that not
merely
suits my interests,
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but
even is one of the challenges of
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today
's world. Since I
still
have the motivation to discover the laws of nature, I chose to
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study
bio-inspired robots, and during my
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master's
degree, I
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studied
extensively
the types of robots that mimic the locomotion of animals.

The topic of my
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master's
thesis was on extracting dynamic equations and simulating the motion of a worm-like robot.
As a result
, I could extend the motion equations of this robot and prove the results of my research by computer software. Toward the
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end
of my
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master's
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courses
, I realized that
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control
science, followed by intelligence, is an inseparable component of robotics.
Therefore
, from two years ago until
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today
, I have
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studied
and implemented various
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control
methods and I have published articles in this field.

Besides
, in the last two years, I have concluded that
in addition
to studying,
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working
in a profession
also
has several benefits for me. These include gaining professional experience, the ability to
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work
in a team, and improving social
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skills
. For this purpose, I spent a
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year
designing
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different
parts and printing them with a 3D printer for a group
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working
on soft rehabilitation robots. After that, for about a
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year
, I
also
headed the mechanic's department of an industrial online store. In this job, I became acquainted with Internet businesses and concepts such as the principles of SEO, marketing, and contracting, about which I had no previous knowledge. As the team leader, I
also
planned and managed the
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work
of 9 individuals in my group.

I
currently
devote most of my time to
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study
and research. I recently submitted two articles in the
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field
of robotics in the Soft Computing and
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Automatica
journals. At the same time, I am planning to
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start
a new
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project
inspired by my previous
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work
.
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I
this
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project
, I am going to develop dynamic equations of a two-dimensional worm-like robot
that is
completely designed by myself.

For the following reasons, I
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think
I am the
right
person to participate in this project:

• Although my sister is young, she has been suffering from a special type of rheumatoid arthritis for
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many
years and her disease is
currently
incurable, and this gives me a strong reason to
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work
on your
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project
which benefits humans.

• Since I was a member of a team that worked on soft robots with pneumatic actuators
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used
for hand rehabilitation for about a
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year
. I have
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studied
the movement of the joints of the human body.

• I am familiar with the governing equations, the locomotion, and the structure of a wide range of bio-robots.

• Although my
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field
is not
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control
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engineering
, I have designed various linear, nonlinear, fuzzy, and industrial
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control
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systems and
I am
fully
acquainted with concepts such as uncertainty, disturbance, and noise.

• I do believe that consistency is more
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important
than perfection.

• I don’t need an in-person reminder for doing my tasks.

• As I know from my personal experiences, I am a
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fast
learner.
Consequently
, I can
bravely
step out of my comfort zone and do something new as I did
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before
.

• I have been a manager.
As a result
, I am a multi-task and team-oriented person.
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