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+ The difficult college-leavers have to face when applying for/ finding a job + Common mistakes in job interviews

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- Returning with this topic. Today, I would like to take this opportunity to talk about the problems in job-seeking. And my presentation consists of 2 main parts which is the challenges that college graduates confront when looking for jobs and the general fault that jobseekers commonly mistake when taking in job interviews. Let’s begin with the first section. - Yes, there are a lot of difficulties in applying for a job for university-leavers. The reason behind this is that one of the most important problems that I want to mention in my presentation is high expectations of recruiters from applicants nowadays. This means they always request that candidates must have experience, qualifications, and character in the sector that they’re looking for. I also believe that to start a job, we need to have not only the theory learned from school but also practical skills gained from life. Take the case of the recruitment of the marketing department in Vingroup as a plain example. They informed that they just recruit the candidates with standard such as have much experience in marketing, have to be creative, flexible and responsible in work. Futhermore they also offered jobseekers that be communicative, passionate and have English skills, soft skills and computer skills, et cetera. Even though we couldn't equate all, I believe the most employers these days commonly demand like this. That would be a reasonable difficulty to need to address in finding a job. Personally, I think it’s true to some extent. - Then, we will move to the second point. For me, I think it’s really common to make mistakes in job interviews. Especially, fresh graduate students frequently have fundamental mistakes like arriving late or too early, using cellphones, losing focus, et cetera. But I think the most popular mistakes is that talking too much. I mean, the candidates often tend to give long and detailed answers to all questions. It’s not necessary to help us to stand out from the crowd. This might be explained by fact that the employers always have to interrupt applicants when they answer too long. In addition, the recruiters wouldn’t be impressive with long answers instead of short answers but enough information that recruiters want to hear. So, if we want to come across well in job interviews, I think we should change our mindset and try to give enough and compelling answers. I believe that employers will be persuaded for that. - To summarize, everything always has two sides, advantages and disadvantages, I consider that the importance is that we always have a significant effort and intense passion to reach whatever we want.
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jobseekers
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when taking in
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Yes, there are
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a lot of
difficulties in applying for a
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job
for university-leavers. The reason behind this is that one of the most
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important
problems that I
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to mention in my presentation is high expectations of recruiters from applicants nowadays. This means they always request that candidates
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must
have experience, qualifications, and character in the sector that they’re looking for. I
also
believe that to
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start
a
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job
, we need to have not
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only
the theory learned from school
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but
also
practical
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skills
gained from life. Take the case of the recruitment of the marketing department in
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Vingroup
as a plain example. They informed that they
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recruit the candidates with standard such as have much experience in marketing,
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have to
be creative, flexible and responsible in work.
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Futhermore
they
also
offered
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jobseekers
that be communicative, passionate and have English
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skills
, soft
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skills
and computer
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skills
,
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et cetera
.
Even though
we couldn't equate all, I believe the most employers these days
commonly
demand like this. That would be a reasonable difficulty to need to address in finding a
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job
.
Personally
, I
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it’s true to
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some
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to the second point. For me, I
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it’s
really
common to
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make
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mistakes
in
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job
interviews.
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, fresh graduate students
frequently
have fundamental
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mistakes
like arriving late or too early, using cellphones, losing focus,
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et cetera
.
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But
I
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think
the most popular
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mistakes
is that talking too much.
I mean
, the candidates
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often
tend to give long and detailed
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answers
to all questions. It’s not necessary to
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help
us to stand out from the crowd. This might be
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explained
by fact that the employers always
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have to
interrupt applicants when they
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answer
too long.
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, the recruiters wouldn’t be impressive with long
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answers
instead
of short
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answers
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but
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enough
information that recruiters
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, if we
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to
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come
across
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we should
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change
our mindset and try to give
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enough
and compelling
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answers
. I believe that employers will
be persuaded
for that.

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To summarize
, everything always has two sides, advantages and disadvantages, I consider that the importance is that we always have a significant effort and intense passion to reach whatever we
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want
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IELTS speaking + The difficult college-leavers have to face when applying for/ finding a job + Common mistakes in job interviews

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4 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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