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Learning and the education system

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Learning is the most important part of human life. Since the birth itself, we start learning things by considering, watching and understanding our surroundings. Expressions, Emotions, Way of talking everything we learn by grasping how people around us are doing it. So if I would consider the growth from the birth most of things are bound to be with the practical examples, but here is a catch, we know there are a lot things which we can not know or we are not aware of, for an example History what exactly happened in the past? How did we reach to this modern ERA? Similarly the Geographical structure, which teaches us how actually world is organized and what all things are present around us? The system should also focus on how and why as well not only the way to do the work. To understand each and every aspects of living happening life, we need Education System in place. Current Education system provides us the knowledge through books, which clarifies, explains how Nature Evolved and works? What are we supposed to do, for achieving something beneficial in life and to live a stable life. These foundation qualification programs are mostly based on the theoretical knowledge but when somebody is not able to understand where and how to apply this acquired knowledge then the problem arises. This problem can be termed as "lack of practical sense". If education system go ahead with sharing the practical understanding of each and every theoretical aspects then definitely this will help the person to grow mentally and make them smart enough to apply or enhance their knowledge while using the gained understanding from the theoretical programs. Assigning multiple daily tasks to the students so that they can actually use their own thinking ability and methodology to find out the solution or at the least possible solution, this brain-storming would actually put pressure on mind to discover best possible approach to achieve the goal. The trainer shouldn't be assigning more than what a growing mind can bear because excess of anything may lead to some other worst problems. The nature itself tells us that the balance is the must required ingredient in life. So Education System should also be consist of equal mixture of Practical and Theoretical knowledge. In my perspective current primary education program should allow someone to use the learnt theoretical knowledge. This might be by providing the live example or demonstration of the same so that person who is learning this can prepare his mindset as well to apply, utilize this gained knowledge in the specific situation.
Learning is the most
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important
part of human
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life
. Since the birth itself, we
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start
learning things by considering, watching and

understanding our surroundings. Expressions, Emotions, Way of talking everything we learn by grasping how
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people
around

us are doing it.
So
if I would consider the growth from the birth
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most of things
are bound
to be with the
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practical
examples,

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but
here is a catch, we know there are
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a lot things
which we can not
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know or
we are not aware of, for an example History what

exactly happened in the past? How did we reach to this modern ERA?
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Similarly
the Geographical structure, which teaches us

how
actually
world
is organized
and what all things are present around us? The
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system
should
also
focus on how and why as
well


not
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only
the way to do the work.

To understand each and every
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aspects
of living happening
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life
, we need
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Education
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System
in place.
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Current
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Education
system

provides us the
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knowledge
through books, which clarifies,
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explains
how Nature Evolved and works? What are we supposed to do,

for achieving something beneficial in
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life
and to
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live
a stable
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life
. These foundation qualification programs are
mostly
based on the
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theoretical
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knowledge
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but
when somebody is not able to understand where and how to apply this acquired
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knowledge
then the problem arises.

This problem can
be termed
as
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"
lack of
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practical
sense
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"
.

If
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education
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system
go ahead with sharing the
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practical
understanding of each and every
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theoretical
aspects then definitely this will
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help


the person to grow mentally and
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make
them smart
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enough
to apply or enhance their
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knowledge
while using the gained understanding from

the
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theoretical
programs.

Assigning multiple daily tasks to the students
so
that they can
actually
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use
their
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own
thinking ability and methodology to find out the solution

or at the least possible solution, this brain-storming would
actually
put pressure on mind to
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discover best
possible approach to achieve the goal.

The trainer shouldn't be assigning more than what a growing mind can bear
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because
excess of anything may lead to
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some
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other
worst problems.

The nature itself
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tells
us that the balance is the
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must
required ingredient in
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life
.
So
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Education
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System
should
also
be
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consist
of equal

mixture of
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Practical
and
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Theoretical
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knowledge
. In my perspective
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current
primary
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education
program should
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allow
someone to
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use


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the
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learnt
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theoretical
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knowledge
. This might be by providing the
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live
example or demonstration of the same
so
that person who is learning

this can prepare his mindset as
well
to apply, utilize this gained
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knowledge
in the specific situation.
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IELTS speaking Learning and the education system

Speaking
  American English
10 paragraphs
433 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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