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Describe your dream job when you were young. v.1

Describe your dream job when you were young. v. 1
Describe your dream job when you were young. You should say: what kind of job it is where you did learn about it what kind of training/ skills are needed for that job and explain why it was your dream job when you were young.   Model Answer 1: I think that for those, who like physics, gravity is a very interesting subject. It becomes even more interesting when without gravity, a person (an astronaut that is) can grow up to three per cent taller if he/she spends at least 6 months on the international space station. Now, please tell me how many cooler jobs are there in the world which can help you grow three per cent taller in six months? ! Well, the answer is “none”. I guess, it should be clear by now that becoming an astronaut was my dream job, especially after watching “the star trek” TV series, when I was young, except of course I had no clue at that time that it could actually help me grow three per cent because the absence of gravity helps expand our spine if I had somehow managed to spend at least 6 months in the space station. Anyway, there are many other cool things about being an Astronaut. But, first, let me tell you who exactly an astronaut is. Well, Astronauts gather information about the space in general by conducting experiments with the spacecraft itself to develop new concepts in design, engineering, and the navigation of a vehicle outside the Earth's atmosphere. However, it is not easy to become an astronaut because one has to have at least a Bachelor degree in science and at least 1, 000 hours pilot-in-command time in jet aircraft. He/she would also need to meet a minimum physical requirement as far as his height, visual acuity and blood pressure are concerned, specified by NASA. Anyway, being an astronaut was my dream job as a young because I was always fascinated by the vast empty space around us and how it affected our life on this earth. Besides, the idea of becoming an astronaut always gave me a feeling of tremendous adventure as far as the possibility of going to new worlds and walking on land there where nobody has been before. Besides, how cool would that be if having a job would allow someone to become an explorer, scientist, engineer, and pilot, all in one, at the same time!   Sample Answer 2: When I was young, I wanted to work for a major aviation company as a pilot. In fact, becoming a pilot, who flies commercial aeroplanes, was my dream in my childhood. I have heard about this job from my teachers and relatives in my childhood and then I had a superficial idea about this job. When I was 15 or 16 years old, I saw a documentary on the tasks the pilots do on the Discovery channel that gave me a clear idea of the jobs of a commercial aeroplane pilot. Working as a pilot requires comprehensive training and to become a good pilot one needs very good quality and skillsets. Usually, the commercial airline companies hire the candidates and then give them comprehensive training, both theoretical and practical, and after particular hours of flawless flying records, the candidates are sent to work for their jobs. The theoretical parts teach them the different aspects of flying, route, safety and process guidelines where the practical parts allow them to actually fly a real aeroplane. They need to prove that they have gained sufficient skills to fly a commercial plane before they are appointed to do the job. I was a fascination with flying the aeroplane in the sky. It was a thrilling job for me when I was young. Since different people of the family members started giving me the idea of good careers and what I would become in the future, I started speculating my own idea and I found the job of a pilot very exciting and prestigious. I knew that being a pilot would allow me to visit different countries across our boundaries and would allow me to meet different people and these 2 ideas also attracted me toward this job. For all those reasons it was my dream job when I was young. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics: Describe a challenging job or career you know about. Describe a job that helps others. Describe a job you want to do in the future.
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job
when you were
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. You should say: what kind of
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it
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where you did learn about it

what kind of training/
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skills
are needed
for that job

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why it was your
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when you were
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.
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Model Answer 1:

I
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think
that for those, who like physics, gravity is a
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very
interesting subject. It
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becomes
even more interesting when without gravity, a person (an
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astronaut
that is
) can grow up to three per cent taller if he/she spends at least 6 months on the international
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space
station.
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Now
,
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please
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tell
me how
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many
cooler
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jobs
are there in the world which can
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help
you grow three per cent taller in six months? !
Well
, the answer is “none”.

I guess
, it should be
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clear
by
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now
that becoming an
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astronaut
was my
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dream
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job
,
especially
after watching “the
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star trek
” TV series, when I was
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young
, except
of course
I had no clue at that time that it could
actually
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help
me grow three per cent
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because
the absence of gravity
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helps
expand our spine if I had somehow managed to spend at least 6 months in the
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space
station.

Anyway
, there are
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many
other cool things about being an
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Astronaut
.
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But
,
first
,
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let
me
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tell
you who exactly an
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astronaut
is.
Well
,
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Astronauts
gather information about the
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space
in general
by conducting experiments with the spacecraft itself to develop new concepts in design, engineering, and the navigation of a vehicle outside the Earth's atmosphere.
However
, it is not easy to
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become
an
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astronaut
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because
one
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has to
have at least a Bachelor degree in science and at least 1, 000 hours pilot-in-command time in jet aircraft. He/she would
also
need to
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meet
a minimum physical requirement as far as his height, visual acuity and blood pressure
are concerned
, specified by NASA.

Anyway
, being an
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astronaut
was my
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dream
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job
as a
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young
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because
I was always fascinated by the vast empty
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space
around us and how it
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affected
our life on this earth.
Besides
, the
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idea
of becoming an
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astronaut
always gave me a feeling of tremendous adventure as far as the possibility of going to new worlds and walking on land there
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where
nobody has been
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before
.
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Besides
, how cool would that be if having a
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job
would
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allow
someone to
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become
an explorer, scientist, engineer, and
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pilot
, all in one, at the same time!
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Sample Answer 2:

When I was
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young
, I wanted to work for a major aviation
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company
as a
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pilot
. In fact, becoming a
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pilot
, who flies
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commercial
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aeroplanes
, was my
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dream
in my childhood. I have heard about this
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job
from my teachers and relatives in my childhood and then I had a superficial
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idea
about this
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job
. When I was 15 or 16 years
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old
, I
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saw
a documentary on the tasks the
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pilots
do on the Discovery channel that gave me a
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clear
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idea
of the
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jobs
of a
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commercial
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aeroplane
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pilot
. Working as a
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pilot
requires comprehensive training and to
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become
a
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good
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pilot
one needs
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very
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good
quality and
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skillsets
.
Usually
, the
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commercial
airline
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companies
hire the candidates and then give them comprehensive training, both theoretical and practical, and after particular hours of flawless flying records, the candidates are
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sent
to work for their
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jobs
. The theoretical parts teach them the
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different
aspects of flying, route, safety and process guidelines where the practical parts
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allow
them to
actually
fly
a real
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aeroplane
. They need to prove that they have gained sufficient
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skills
to
fly
a
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commercial
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plane
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before
they
are appointed
to do the
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job
. I was a fascination with flying the
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aeroplane
in the sky. It was a thrilling
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job
for me when I was
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young
. Since
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different
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people
of the family members
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started
giving me the
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idea
of
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good
careers and what I would
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become
in the future, I
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started
speculating my
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own
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idea
and I found the
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job
of a
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pilot
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very
exciting and prestigious. I knew that being a
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pilot
would
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allow
me to visit
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different
countries across our boundaries and would
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allow
me to
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meet
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different
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people
and these 2
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ideas
also
attracted me toward this
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job
. For all those reasons it was my
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dream
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job
when I was
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young
. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics:
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Describe
a challenging
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job
or career
you know
about.
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Describe
a
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job
that
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helps
others.
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Describe
a
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job
you want to do in the future.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
84Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe your dream job when you were young. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
767 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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