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Describe the most beautiful natural scenery you have ever seen. v.1

Describe the most beautiful natural scenery you have ever seen. v. 1
Describe the most beautiful natural scenery you have ever seen. You should say: what it is where and when you have seen it who was with you and explain what makes it the most beautiful natural scenery you have ever seen. Model Answer 1: Different people have different ideas about their versions of the most beautiful natural sceneries while I have my own. But, unfortunately, I am not really a poet nor do I have the talents, skills or proper choice of the words to describe one of the most beautiful natural scenery I have ever seen. Still, I would like to go ahead and give it a try to do some justice to this topic. The most naturally beautiful scenery, I am talking about, is a little natural reserve of my country which I visited along about a few years ago. The place was surrounded by green mountains and forests. There was no ocean in that reserve, but the beautiful lake there was no less beautiful and inviting than an ocean. There were six mountains in that place, and each of those mountain tops was competing with each other to glow like a piece of heaven on earth with just about enough natural light on them. There was a huge but luscious green valley in that area that stretched up to the feet of those mountains as if it wanted to provide some touch of softness into the rugged mountainous terrain. The place looked so beautiful, and the natural smell of the luscious green there was so intoxicating that I felt like I could spend the rest of my life there. Besides, the calming effect of the beautiful lake on my mind and body felt like a supernatural experience to me. All in all, I think, it was the most beautiful natural scenery, I have ever seen, because I don’t think that it has ever been affected or destroyed by human-created pollution. The place looked so beautiful to me that I actually forgot about all the worldly worries as long as I was there while enjoying the little hide and seek game of mountains with the sunlight and chirping of the birds. Finally, the place seemed so peaceful that even the wind seemed to be too careful to blow with speed lest it had upset the natural quietness and serenity of that place.   Sample Answer 2: When  I was a university student, I went to a village which was the living place of my best friend's grandfather's house. It was in a remote area and the natural scenery I saw there was the most beautiful natural scenery I have ever seen. It was in (. . . say the name of a place. . . ) and the small river, the hill, the green fields and the blue sky made a combination that I felt something out of the world. I saw it in one autumn evening when I went to explore the surroundings of the village. That was an awe-inspiring scenery that I will never forget. I saw this scenic beauty in 2011 and it was mid-autumn season then. My friend, I and one of my friend's cousin were present at that time and I heard from my friend that his village was a very beautiful place. I could not believe how much beautiful it was until I saw it with my own eyes. We left for the river in the evening and I was amazed to notice the hill and the sloping road track beside it. The river was flowing gently and the vast paddy fields were all around us. I heard the chattering of the birds in the green trees and the sound was creating harmony in my ears. To me, this was a truly amazing feeling to witness natural scenery that could exist only in our imagination. I have seen many rivers, hills and paddy fields but in my friend's village, they were arranged in such a way which is only possible in an artist's picture. The blue sky seemed very nearer to the horizon and the vast green all around us make me feel like visiting a fairyland.   Tips for talking about this Cue Card Topic: For this cue card topic, you are expected to talk about the natural scenery that you have seen and think is the most beautiful. First talk about the place and scenery. This can be a particular thing (like a river, forest, hill, sky, rainbow, view from the mountain, fountain, ocean etc. ) or can be a place that has a really eye-catchy landscape. If this place/scenery has a name, say that and then mention where it is situated. Then mention when you saw that and how awestricken you were witnessing this out-of-the-world scenery. Now give the details of the view/ scenery and mention when you saw it. If you had companies and relatives, mention who they were and why they went with you. Also, mention if this was a planned trip or a sudden encounter of the scenery. The final question is a tricky one and in your answer, you have to convince the examiner why you think that was the most beautiful scenery you have ever seen. The debate for most beautiful scenery is ever ending and in fact, the most beautiful scenery to someone should be based on his/her personal experience. So emphasise your personal experience and feeling when you witnessed this scenery. Mention that you are yet to explore lots of beautiful places in the world and so far in your small experience this was the most beautiful scenery you have ever seen.
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Describe
the most
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beautiful
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natural
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scenery
you have
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ever
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seen
. You should say: what it is where and when you have
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seen
it who was with you and
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explain
what
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makes
it the most
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beautiful
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natural
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scenery
you have
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ever
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seen
.

Model Answer 1:

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Different
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people
have
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different
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ideas
about their versions of the most
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beautiful
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natural
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sceneries
while I have my
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own
.
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But
, unfortunately, I am not
really
a poet nor do I have the talents,
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skills
or proper choice of the words to
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describe
one of the most
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beautiful
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natural
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scenery
I have
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ever
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seen
.
Still
, I would like to go ahead and give it a try to do
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some
justice to this topic.

The most
naturally
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beautiful
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scenery
, I am talking about, is a
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little
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natural
reserve of my country which I visited along about a few years ago. The
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place
was surrounded
by
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green
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mountains
and forests. There was no ocean in that reserve,
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but
the
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beautiful
lake there was no less
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beautiful
and inviting than an ocean. There were six
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mountains
in that
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place
, and each of those
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mountain
tops was competing with each other to glow like a piece of heaven on earth with
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just
about
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enough
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natural
light on them.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
There
was a huge
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but
luscious
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green
valley in that area that stretched up to the feet of those
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mountains
as if it wanted to provide
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some
touch of softness into the rugged mountainous terrain. The
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place
looked
so
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beautiful
, and the
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natural
smell of the luscious
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green
there was
so
intoxicating that I felt like I could spend the rest of my life there.
Besides
, the calming effect of the
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beautiful
lake on my mind and body felt like a supernatural
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experience
to me.

All in all, I
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think
, it was the most
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beautiful
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natural
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scenery
, I have
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ever
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seen
,
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because
I don’t
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think
that it has
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ever
been
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affected
or
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destroyed
by human-created pollution. The
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place
looked
so
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beautiful
to me that I
actually
forgot about all the worldly worries as long as I was there while enjoying the
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little
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hide and seek
game of
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mountains
with the sunlight and chirping of the birds.
Finally
, the
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place
seemed
so
peaceful that even the wind seemed to be too careful to blow with speed lest it had upset the
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natural
quietness and serenity of that
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place
.
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Sample Answer 2:

When
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I was a university student, I went to a
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village
which was the living
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place
of my best friend's grandfather's
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house
. It was in a remote area and the
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natural
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scenery
I
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saw
there was the most
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beautiful
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natural
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scenery
I have
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ever
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seen
. It was in (.
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.
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.
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say
the name of a
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place
.
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.
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.
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)
and the
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small
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river
, the
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hill
, the
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green
fields and the blue sky made a combination that I felt something out of the world. I
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saw
it in one autumn evening when I went to explore the surroundings of the
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village
. That was an awe-inspiring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scenery
that I will never forget. I
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saw
this scenic beauty in 2011 and it was mid-autumn season then.

My friend, I and one of my friend's cousin were present at that time and I heard from my friend that his
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village
was a
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very
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beautiful
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place
. I could not believe how much
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beautiful
it was until I
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saw
it with my
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own
eyes.

We
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left
for the
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river
in the
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evening and
I
was amazed
to notice the
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hill
and the sloping road
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track
beside it. The
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river
was flowing
gently
and the vast paddy fields were all around us. I heard the chattering of the birds in the
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green
trees and the sound was creating harmony in my ears.

To me, this was a
truly
amazing feeling to witness
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natural
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scenery
that could exist
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only
in our imagination. I have
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seen
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many
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rivers
,
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hills
and paddy fields
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but
in my friend's
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village
, they
were arranged
in such a way which is
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only
possible in an artist's picture. The blue sky seemed
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very
nearer to the horizon and the vast
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green
all around us
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make
me feel like visiting a fairyland.
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Tips for talking about this Cue Card Topic: For this cue card topic, you are
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expected
to talk about the
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natural
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scenery
that you have
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seen
and
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think
is the most
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beautiful
.
First
talk about the
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place
and
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scenery
. This can be a particular thing (like a
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river
, forest,
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hill
, sky, rainbow, view from the
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mountain
, fountain, ocean etc.
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)
or can be a
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place
that has a
really
eye-catchy landscape. If this place/scenery has a name, say that and then
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mention
where it
is situated
. Then
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mention
when you
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saw
that and how
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awestricken
you were witnessing this out-of-the-world
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scenery
.
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Now
give the
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details
of the view/
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scenery
and
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mention
when you
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saw
it. If you had
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companies
and relatives,
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mention
who they were and why they
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went with
you.
Also
,
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mention
if this was a planned trip or a sudden encounter of the
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scenery
. The final question is a tricky one and in your answer, you
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have to
convince the examiner why you
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think
that was the most
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beautiful
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scenery
you have
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ever
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seen
. The debate for most
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beautiful
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scenery
is
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ever
ending and in fact, the most
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beautiful
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scenery
to someone should
be based
on his/her personal
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experience
.
So
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emphasise
your personal
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experience
and feeling when you witnessed this
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scenery
.
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Mention
that you are
yet
to explore lots of
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beautiful
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places
in the world and
so
far in your
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small
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experience
this was the most
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beautiful
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scenery
you have
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ever
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seen
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
128Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe the most beautiful natural scenery you have ever seen. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
940 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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