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Describe something you plan/want to learn in the future. v.1

Describe something you plan/want to learn in the future. v. 1
Describe something you plan/want to learn in the future. You should say:  what you plan/want to learn in the future  why you want to learn it  where and how you will learn it and explain how learning this might help you.   Model Answer 1: They say that there is no end to learning. In fact, there are so many things in this world to learn, but unfortunately, I neither have the time nor the money to do so. But, one thing, I really want to learn for sure, is the "Japanese" language. By the way, I started to dream about learning the Japanese language since the time when my father had introduced me to a team of Japanese Agricultural experts about 10 years ago. By the way, my father (now a retired person) used to work as a senior official at a government office of my country as an agricultural expert that allowed him the opportunity to meet the same kind of professionals from many other countries in order to exchange their views and opinions on different agricultural issues. Anyway, after introducing me to those Japanese experts, my father whispered to me that the Japanese people have some of the most brilliant minds in the world, and we can learn a lot of things from them. My meeting with them was very brief, and my English was very poor back then, but still, I managed to figure out that they were very polite and civilized people in their behaviour. In fact, it was after that meeting that I started to make some pen friends from Japan and learn about their language and culture on and off. But, I knew that it was never going to be enough to learn a different language or culture. So, now I am also planning to enrol at a Japanese language school in the near future in addition to collecting some useful language videos from the Japanese cultural centre of my country. Anyway, learning the Japanese language would help me to understand the culture, lifestyles and traditions of Japanese people which I have really admired since my childhood. Besides, it would also allow me to learn about some of their innovative ideas and incorporate them into our culture and working style. Finally, learning this great language would also allow me to have better employment opportunities since there are many successful Japanese companies all over the world.
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Describe
something you plan/want to
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learn
in the future. You should say:
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what you plan/want to
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learn
in the future
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why you want to
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learn
it
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where and how you will
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learn
it and
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explain
how
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learning
this might
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help
you.
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Model Answer 1:

They say that there is no
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end
to
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learning
. In fact, there are
so
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many
things in this world to
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learn
,
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but
unfortunately, I neither have the time nor the money to do
so
.
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But
, one thing, I
really
want to
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learn
for sure, is the
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"
Japanese
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"
language.

By the way, I
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started
to dream about
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learning
the Japanese
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language
since the time when my father had introduced me to a team of Japanese Agricultural experts about 10 years ago. By the way, my father (
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now
a retired person)
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used
to work as a senior official at a
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government
office of my country as an agricultural expert that
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allowed
him the opportunity to
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meet
the same kind of professionals from
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many
other countries in order to exchange their views and opinions on
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different
agricultural issues.

Anyway
, after introducing me to those Japanese experts, my father whispered to me that the Japanese
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people
have
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some
of the most brilliant minds in the world, and we can
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learn
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a lot of
things from them. My meeting with them was
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very
brief, and my English was
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very
poor back then,
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but
still
, I managed to figure out that they were
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very
polite and civilized
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people
in their
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behaviour
. In fact, it was after that meeting that I
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started
to
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make
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some
pen friends from Japan and
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learn
about their
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language
and
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culture
on and off.
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But
, I knew that it was never going to be
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enough
to
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learn
a
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different
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language
or
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culture
.
So
,
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now
I am
also
planning to enrol at a Japanese
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language
school in the near future
in addition
to collecting
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some
useful
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language
videos from the Japanese cultural
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centre
of my country.

Anyway
,
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learning
the Japanese
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language
would
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help
me to understand the
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culture
, lifestyles and traditions of Japanese
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people
which I have
really
admired since my childhood.
Besides
, it would
also
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allow
me to
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learn
about
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some
of their innovative
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ideas
and incorporate them into our
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culture
and working style.
Finally
,
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learning
this great
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language
would
also
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allow
me to have better employment opportunities since there are
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many
successful Japanese
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companies
all over the world.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe something you plan/want to learn in the future. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
402 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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