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Describe an occasion or event when you were congratulated. v.2

Describe an occasion or event when you were congratulated. v. 2
Describe an occasion or event when you were congratulated. You should say: what the occasion was when it was who congratulated you and why and explain how you felt about it.   Model Answer 1: I don’t exactly recall that many occasions when I was congratulated, primarily because, over the years, I have remained more of an “under-achiever” rather than a bold and successful person. But, I guess that my luck decided to smile on me also once when I also got some sort of recognition and congratulation for something which I never thought I would ever be able to pull off. Yes, it is hard to believe that I got congratulated by a group of people, who had never taken me seriously prior to that pleasing moment because I helped my company save a lot of unnecessary costs. Anyway, here is how the story went. About 5 years ago, I had just started working as a Jr. Accounting Analyst at a small electronics appliance manufacturing company. But, when I started my job there, the company was already struggling financially. Of course, that was not exactly any of my business because, frankly speaking, I was just happy to have a job there. But, I could still feel the tension and commotion in and around the offices of my company concerning the direction of the company. Anyway, while we all were worried about the direction of the company, one day, we all were called at a meeting by our company chairman who asked us to prepare some reports on how to cut the high costs of running the company. So, we all got busy finding the reasons behind such high costs and preparing reports on it. Once all the reports were submitted, it was time to know which report(s) got the best reviews and remarks. And, to my surprise, I found that it was my reports which got the best comments and remarks. In fact, the company board of directors even called me at their office and congratulated me for the findings. Needless to say, I felt so happy and speechless about the congratulation. After that congratulation from my company board of directors, I thanked them while also realizing for the first time that I also had some good potential in me for a successful career ahead of me.   Sample Answer 2: We all get appreciations for the good things we do for others or for our great achievements or personal excellence. One such occasion when I was congratulated was the time when our debate team won the district/ county level championship. It was 2001 and I was a student of grade 8. I was an active member of our school debate team and had participated in different solo and team debate competitions. The yearly inter-school division/ county level championship is considered to be a prestigious tournament and the final is broadcasted on local TV channels as well as on the radio. Our school had never been able to win the championship before 2001, though some of the debate teams participated till the semi-final round of the championship. This year I was the captain of the debate team and to everyone's great surprise, we won the final. Most of the people in our city watched the final on TV and had been very excited, happy and proud that we won. The school arranged a ceremony to congratulate us for our achievement and I found more than 5 hundred students, their guardians and local people were present there. I was so proud, happy and excited about the occasion and when all those people started congratulating me, I felt like I was flying above the sky. Later, I received many congratulations and appreciations in my life, but the excitement and joy I felt on that occasion were incomparable. We walked through the long line towards the stage and people stood up and clapped their hands and were greeting us. Out teachers, local political leaders, upper-level government employees and renowned persons of the locality were also present there. The program lasted for 2/3 hours and we got many gifts and bouquets as well.   Tips for answering this cue card topic: This cue card demands you to talk about an occasion when other people congratulated you for something good you did or achieved. Start this cue card speaking topic by clearing describing the occasion. Also, mention how old you were at that time and what was the reason for this occasion. Since the second question asks “when it was”, try to give the year of the occasion and if this is not possible mention how long ago it was and how old you possibly were at that time. There can be two different scenarios for the occasion of the congratulation: 1. That was to reward you for a fine performance or extraordinary achievement. 2.   You did something mention-worthy and good for others and people congratulated you for that. Mention what type of scenario was for you and who were present there. Mention the type of congratulation you received and how you felt about it. The final question of this cue card asks you to express your feeling about the occasion, achievement, reaction towards the applauses and congratulations. Some of the occasion people usually get congratulation, applauses and greetings that you can talk about for this cue card topic: 1. Birthday/ Marriage day/ Becoming parents/ getting engaged etc. 2. Being selected as the captain of a team/ getting admitted to a renowned college or university etc. 3. Extraordinary academic performance and result/ being nominated for the scholarship/ getting jobs etc. 4. Being able to quit smoking/ a bad habit etc. 5. Doing something brave/ helping someone in danger/ rescuing someone etc. If you can answer this cue card topic, you should be able to answer the following cue card topics as well: 1. Describe a memorable event in your life. 2. Describe one of your achievements. 3. Describe a happy occasion of your life. 4. Describe something exemplary you did. 5. Describe an event when you helped others. 6. Describe a party/ occasion you recently had. 7. Describe a change that happened in your life. 8. Describe an event when people applauded you.
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an
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occasion
or
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event
when you were
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congratulated
. You should say: what the
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occasion
was when it was
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who
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congratulated
you and why and
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explain
how you
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felt
about it.
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Model
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Answer
1:

I don’t exactly recall that
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many
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occasions
when I was
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congratulated
,
primarily
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because
, over the years, I have remained more of an “under-achiever”
rather
than a bold and successful person.
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But
,
I guess
that my luck decided to smile on me
also
once when I
also
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got
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some
sort of recognition and
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congratulation
for
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something
which I never
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thought
I would ever be
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able
to pull off.

Yes, it is
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hard
to believe that I
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got
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congratulated
by a group of
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people
,
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who
had never taken me
seriously
prior to that pleasing moment
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because
I
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helped
my
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company
save
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a lot of
unnecessary costs.

Anyway
, here is how the story went. About 5 years ago, I had
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just
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started
working as a Jr. Accounting Analyst at a
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small
electronics appliance manufacturing
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company
.
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But
, when I
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started
my job there, the
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company
was already struggling
financially
.
Of course
, that was not exactly any of my business
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because
,
frankly
speaking, I was
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just
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happy
to have a job there.
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But
, I could
still
feel the tension and commotion in and around the offices of my
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company
concerning the direction of the
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company
.
Anyway
, while we all
were worried
about the direction of the
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company
, one day, we all
were called
at a meeting by our
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company
chairman
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who
asked us to prepare
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some
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reports
on how to
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cut
the high costs of running the
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company
.
So
, we all
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got
busy finding the reasons behind such high costs and preparing
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reports
on it. Once all the
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reports
were submitted
, it was
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time
to know which
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report(s)
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got
the best reviews and remarks. And, to my surprise, I found that it was my
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reports
which
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got
the best comments and remarks. In fact, the
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company
board of directors even called me at their office and
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congratulated
me for the findings.

Needless to say
, I
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felt
so
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happy
and speechless about the
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congratulation
. After that
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congratulation
from my
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company
board of directors, I thanked them while
also
realizing for the
first
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time
that I
also
had
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some
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good
potential in me for a successful career ahead of me.
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Sample
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Answer
2:

We all
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get
appreciations for the
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good
things we do for others or for our great
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achievements
or personal excellence. One such
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occasion
when I was
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congratulated
was the
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time
when our
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debate
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team
won the district/ county level championship.

It was
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2001 and
I was a student of grade 8. I was an active member of our school
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debate
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team
and had participated in
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different
solo and
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team
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debate
competitions. The yearly inter-school division/ county level championship
is considered
to be a prestigious tournament and the
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final
is broadcasted
on local TV channels as
well
as on the radio. Our school had never been
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able
to win the championship
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before
2001, though
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some of the
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debate
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teams
participated till the semi-final round of the championship. This
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year
I was the captain of the
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debate
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team
and to everyone's great surprise, we won the
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final
. Most of the
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people
in our city
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watched
the
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final
on TV and had been
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very
excited,
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happy
and proud that we won. The school arranged a ceremony to congratulate us for our
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achievement
and I found more than 5 hundred students, their guardians and local
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people
were present there. I was
so
proud,
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happy
and excited about the
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occasion
and when all those
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people
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started
congratulating me, I
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felt
like I was flying above the sky.

Later, I received
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many
congratulations and appreciations in my
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life
,
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but
the excitement and joy I
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felt
on that
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occasion
were incomparable. We walked through the long line towards the stage and
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people
stood up and clapped their hands and were greeting us. Out teachers, local political leaders, upper-level
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government
employees and renowned persons of the locality were
also
present there. The program lasted for 2/3
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hours and
we
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got
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many
gifts and bouquets as
well
.
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: This
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demands you to talk about an
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when
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people
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congratulated
you for
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something
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good
you did or achieved.
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this
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speaking
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topic
by clearing describing the
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occasion
.
Also
, mention how
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old
you were at that
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time
and what was the reason for this
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occasion
. Since the second question asks “when it was”, try to give the
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year
of the
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occasion
and if this is not possible mention how long ago it was and how
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old
you
possibly
were at that time.

There can be two
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different
scenarios for the
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occasion
of the
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congratulation: 1
. That was to reward you for a fine performance or extraordinary
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achievement. 2
.
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You did
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something
mention-worthy and
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good
for others and
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people
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congratulated
you for that.

Mention what type of scenario was for you and
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who
were present there. Mention the type of
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congratulation
you received and how you
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felt
about it. The
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final
question of this
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cue
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card
asks you to express your feeling about the
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occasion
,
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achievement
, reaction towards the
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applauses
and congratulations.

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Some of the
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occasion
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people
usually
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get
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congratulation
,
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applauses
and greetings that you can talk about for this
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cue
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card
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topic: 1
. Birthday/ Marriage day/ Becoming parents/ getting engaged etc.

2.
Being selected
as the captain of a team/ getting admitted to a renowned college or university etc.

3. Extraordinary academic performance and result/
being nominated
for the scholarship/ getting jobs etc.

4. Being
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able
to quit smoking/ a
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bad
habit etc.

5. Doing
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something
brave/ helping someone in
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danger
/ rescuing someone etc.

If you can
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this
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, you should be
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to
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the following
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topics
as
well
:

1.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your
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life. 2
.
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Describe
one of your
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achievements. 3
.
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Describe
a
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happy
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occasion
of your
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life. 4
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
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something
exemplary you did.

5.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
an
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event
when you
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helped
others.

6.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a party/
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occasion
you recently had.

7.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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change
that happened in your
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life. 8
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
an
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event
when
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people
applauded you.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
152Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
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IELTS speaking Describe an occasion or event when you were congratulated. v. 2

Speaking
  American English
27 paragraphs
1040 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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